Russian Roulette

A poem I wrote about anger and regret...

Footsteps-I hit the ground runnin'
Bang-bang- people are gunnin'
But I hear nothin'- except
A deep breath- gunblast - then there's nothin' left

My heart sank, then my mind went blank
When people start dyin'- I can't think
Cuz thinkin' makes sense
And there ain't no sense to make out of this

Try for a moment to contemplate
A young girl who finds her fate
At the end of a bullet she cannot escape
And though you try to help
Its too late
And for the rest of your life
Its yourself you hate

If you'd been faster- or quicker
If you hadn't of left- and you'd stayed there with her
If you'd saved the saint- and you killed the sinner
But in this fucked up game there's never a winner

The wheel keeps turnin'
Fannin' the flame that still keeps burnin'
Deep in our minds- but we're still not learnin'
The truth
The fact
If we could only just see
The wheel's Russian Roulette- not Jeopardy

And when you play with bullets
You play with fate
And when you finally kill all the people you hate
Worse than them is the monster you create
And you realize
Lookin' in the reflection
At your hollow eyes
You're the monster
It's yourself you despise
You killed the girl with all your hollow lies

Author's Note

Wrote this as lyrics to a song, but I've heard it sounds like a poem so I put it on here. Let me know what you think, I'm eager to get some opinions on it.

Reviews

[Kelsey]

Everything you write tells a story. Some poems are feelings, some lyrics are stories, but yours are stories and feelings, and that's just amazing. Everything always flows together like it just fell off of your tongue, like an effortless freestyle. Your words are so powerful and so perfectly placed together. Another lovely read, thanks for sharing.

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, those comments mean a lot. I guess there always is a story when I write these things. Usually they're glimpses of my life, an attempt to capture the image of the scene and the emotion as quickly as possible. Once again, thank you very much for reading it. I appreciate it.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I was drawn to this because I wrote a poem called Russian Roulette sometime ago, nothing like this. This is certainly lyrical, and flows wonderfully. Very profound, deep piece. Nicely done.

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've been breaking away from this style lately, in an attempt to try new things.

[MissEpic2902]

I would love to put a tune to this!! and yes It flows like a poem and is Awesome in a lot of ways!!!!

[Poetta]

Sweet! Very awesome ending to an nicely-rhymed poem/lyrics.

[b.platte]

I did get the impression that this was lyrical. It has an easy flow to it (as most of your work does) and I liked it very much.

I always like how you switch things up and go into a three or four line rhyming scheme.

Wonderful :)

[Apatheia]

I really love the idea of this. It tells a real story with true, powerful feelings. Really well done. One of my favorites. You really got me with "If we could only just see/ The wheel's Russian Roulette- not Jeopardy" anddd "It's yourself you despise/ You killed the girl with all your hollow lies" :)

[Hester Vane]

The words definatley sound like a song! As always you have written a piece with beautiful words, depth and meaning! Great job again!

[Kenaz]

Yes very good. Confused about the wheels and Jeopardy haha. But no it's good.

[JodieH]

I think it is fabulous!! its so powerful. My bf doesn't want me to join the army for the fear I will get hurt. But I love the poem/song. :)

[Sirius King]

wow very deep, good read and write

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you ^^