Butterfly Heart

A kiss and then she spins...

she plants a kiss

then spins

she’s gone in a twirl.

I’m stuck with this

and begin

to feel my heart unfurl.

 

left tossing in her wake

butterfly wings

and silly things

inside my mind debates

 

oh, how she plays

-me like the wind

blowing me apart.

blowing me away

where does she send

this butterfly heart…

Author's Note

Just a little musing I decided to post. Because I can.

Reviews

[Damien Davison]

It sounds like a bit of a spark! That's just what I got from it anyways. Great musing!

[Meallea Pomorette]

I think this is your shortest poem that I had read...
I'm used to read your longer works lol...
Anyway, this poem is really sweet..
It's full of wondering and something like an innocent love...
Something like the feeling of first love...

"where does she send
this butterfly heart…"
I love the description here... especially the use of butterfly here...

It's really nice and I can't help reading it all over again...

[MachinaWriter]

lol thank you. It was really a small musing that I sent to...well, to my muse lol Decided to put it up here. I'm sure the shortness is a breath of fresh air after the other ones lol ^^

[Circe]

this has a wonderfully sweet natural flow... reads wistfully and it flitted past in an exhale.. the length and rhythm eloquently collaborated, I really like the style of this musing.

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. As always, its good to hear your thoughts on my work, I value it a lot ^^

[CoveredInLies]

It sounds loke it could very easily be put to a soft and light tune. I could see it becoming something that sticks in my head all day. Especially the "blowing me apart, blowing me away, where does she send this butterfly heart"
Beautiful.

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you ^^ I'm glad you liked it lol

[Kelsey]

Such a beautiful piece in so few words. You put a smile on my face and touched my heart, and once again, with so few words. Beautifully done.

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you ^^ So tiny, right, compared to my other things lol Figured I should give a break to the long epics I'm usually writing haha

[C.C. Marx]

One of your shorter pieces but great all the same....its sweet :)

[MachinaWriter]

I know, right? Probably a breath of fresh air from the novel I usually post under the guise of a poem all the time lol It was a musing I sent to...well, my muse. Decided to post it.

[C.C. Marx]

Well the decision was a good one, it was refreshing, I read it and was like huh, a short poem....I like it :)

[MachinaWriter]

lol ^^

[Southern Cross]

I changed my mind this is my favorite one. Adding to my favs this time :) Oh and BTW ..LOVE THE TITLE

[MachinaWriter]

lol I'm glad you liked it. Finally a title I can be proud of xD

[Southern Cross]

LOL uh huh uh huh

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

I agree with PJ in regards to impulse on your writing. Great piece.

[Patrick]

I think you do better when you write on impulse, with you little muse and all the rest. Many parts to this are so inviting 'butterfly wings and silly things' - i might buy the copyright for that :)
You set the tone well and deliver better

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you, that truly means a lot. I tend to keep these little musings to myself, or I share them with my muse, who inspires them. Felt like posting this one, though. I'm glad I did. I value your comments highly. More than most of the others, actually.

[Southern Cross]

Don't let his ego grow ...His head is too big to hold on his shoulders as it is.

[MachinaWriter]

You make me sound arrogant. I'm not arrogant lol At least...I hope not haha

[Southern Cross]

Not u P. J . You missed the content .

[MachinaWriter]

Ah...I thought you said my head was too big lol Gotcha. haha

[Patrick]

tsk the pair of you