The Message

There's the strangest of feelings today...

The excitement and comfort begins...

But a wonder and doubt still remain...

As I read this again and again...

Oh God, how I want to believe.

But it's tearing my head inside out.

To read the words that you left in this card,

Leaves me knowing what I've been without.

And now...

You made me fall...

You changed my whole mind...

In almost no words at all...

And just as I locked you away...

You showed me all that's within...

I swear, I'll shake if you just look my way...

And then I'll beg you to let this begin...

Oh God, I know I'm in way past my head.

You leave me drowning in all that you say.

It's a gift just to know you at all.

I think I love when you leave me this way.

And now...

You made me fall...

You changed my whole mind...

In almost no words at all...

You say it so soft,

But I've learned to listen.

Can you tell I'm excited,

When my eyes start to glisten?

You left me confused,

By letting me know.

Now I'm rushing to hurry,

Just to take this thing slow.

Oh God, I feel like I might be all wrong.

I twist your words just to read what I need.

You're always catching me so off my guard.

And I'm so nervous like runaway-thieves.

And now...

You made me fall...

You changed my whole mind...

In almost no words at all...

Reviews

[Ann Mariya Roy]

so nice .
You changed my whole mind...
In almost no words at all..
so nice lines.
i am a great fan of your writings.
all of your writing goes strait to my library

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you so much Akhila! That is the greatest compliment you can give me!

[Ann Mariya Roy]

thank you so much

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

A song full of bewilderment by the receiver from the sender of the message.
This line captivated my attention:
"I twist your words just to read what I need."--- Sometimes, people tend to see only those things they wanted to see...but not the truth, for they know the truth would hurt them.

You're good in presenting your ideas in a lyrical piece. Nice word choice.
Loved the concept, too. Keep writing!

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for the great review! I certainly will keep writing

[Sami Khalil]

"You left me confused,

By letting me know.

Now I'm rushing to hurry,

Just to take this thing slow.




Oh God, I feel like I might be all wrong.

I twist your words just to read what I need."

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning...:)..............

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you for the review Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[Diana]

"Oh God, I know I'm in way past my head.
You leave me drowning in all that you say.
It's a gift just to know you at all.'- Sounds like a baptism. Hah hah.

An insightful piece.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you, Diana!

Wow... I had no thought of baptism in my mind but now that you mention it, it does fit. Thanks for the insight!

[K]

Brilliant piece of writing my friend.

[Michael (Letters and Lifelines)]

Thank you my friend!