Him

Watch the butterfly fly with such elegent grace

the sun shining down so perfectly

laying in the grass by the pond in white lace

with my head on his chest

 

Listen to the beating of his heart

as i listen to the breeze of autumn leaves

Everyday i am hit by one of Cupid's darts

for each day i fall more in love

 

His lips caress my cheek so gentle and sweet

I smile as his heart beats faster

the air is cold but we hold eachother for heat

I know I will never let him go

 

The sun begins to set in the sky

Why must thisdayend so soon

Ill wait for the days to pass by

till I can hold my true love again.

 

Author's Note

Not quite my best work. DOnt be too hard on me :)

Reviews

[Impulse]

1st line - "elegent" should be "elegant"
This is a nice little write describing love and the sweet touches and feelings that come along with it. You did a great job of portraying these emotions throughout your piece. You have a few mistakes where you need to go back and put spaces in between your words and capitilize the word "I'. Besides those minor issues, great job =] Keep it up