Drowned With The Rain

leaving behind thoughts and one, just as rain drops left with the sun.

Down on the earth, it goes,

Raving chit-chats don’t last, this time, it flows,

Oh it’s some magic, in those

Watery orbs and the tender talks.

No, I’ll not repeat it; I said it to myself.

Earth is questioning my presence, but I’m

Dreaming in the rain, if that’s a crime.

 

I’m sure water weight isn’t the most,

Guilt does play a big role; maybe,

Dusted with darkness, I feel the apart,

Just like the rain storm, away now to

South, leaving a melting mount behind,

No farewells could have made this better,

“watery orbs and the tender talks”.

Reviews

[living lavender]

thoughts falling like raindrops ~ most go unnoticed. unphased by others.
yet. there are those who stop to enjoy the rain. not afraid of getting wet.
my favorites line:
"Earth is questioning my presence, but I’m
Dreaming in the rain, if that’s a crime."
{this was enchantingly written.}

[Secretpoet]

I love the ending too, and your thoughts are really well thought.

[FlaLover]

I love this!
Beautifully written!
I like "dreaming in the rain"...I actually paused to "feel that"!

[Secretpoet]

thank you sooo muchhh!!!

[FlaLover]

You're welcome

[Dave Brown]

At present. in spite of your well done write, we are not enjoying the pleasure of dreaming in the rain, rather we are nearly drowning in it!
Have a lovely day

[Secretpoet]

metaphorically, in the rains of memories connected to the past..

[Betty Hermelee]

Just as raindrops come and going teasing the sun, leaving it behind and then more raindrops come and go....a cycle of nature, a phenomenon .....so do our thoughts come and go, leaving one behind and then another pops up...as in a dream, one notion follows something completely different.....the sun leaves us for a while when the raindrops fall, then the sun shows its brilliant face again... (this is my interpretation)
Warmly,
B

[Secretpoet]

your thoughts beautifully align with mine and your word choice seems so natural..

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome
Warmly, B