I Am an Artist

Something with a little more truth. I didn't focus on rhythm or meter at all. I didn't really want to...

I began as a flutist...

Twiddling fingers on silver intrument...

This is how I became an artist.

But to be honest, I wasnt all that' briliant,

And I'm not being modest.

 

I admit, I had boyfriend after boyfriend,

I don't think they fit the role very well.

None of them were going to be the one that saved me, soulmate, a godsend.

But one of their names has always been the once-rung-still echoing bell...

I admit, he actually sort of stung,

He made me want to scream.

He was the one strengthening one amung.

But then he made me want to wallow in the tasty depths of ice cream.

 

I waited..No...I counted the days,

He never came,

I never got my way.

I guess I was just a simple bored game.

I got over it,

After a awhile, I subtly missed his voice saying "come here, baby."

Eventually something raised my spirits,

but I was introduced to poetry.

 

Now look at me,

standing above all that sad self-pity.

I'm an artist,

I'd think I'm a pretty bold teen,

After all, he got what he deserved, I've finally eaten off my crust.

Now after all this time, I'd say, "hey look here, I don't need a team, I finally learned to get a little mean."

I don't have a want to be rude,

but I'm happy I'm not worried, no, now I'm an artist.

I hate to be a little brute, but sometmes you just gotta be a little crude.

 

I am an artist

I have learned who to trust

and to make art out of dust and old multi-colord rust

 

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I'm quite proud of myself,

I never really thought that I'd make it this far.

I'd never let some one trophy me on his shelf.

I'm pretty damn happy that I my heart wasn't stuffed into a jar.

 

Everyone I know, they were  a little shocked,

I guess they didn't really expect me to stand up and shake you off.

But no Sir, I've got my heart locked and blocked.

I just stood up, shook you off, looked down and scoffed.

 

I am artist.

You did me a favor.

Granted, I'm nowhere near the smartest,

but you made me braver, not a caver.

 

I am an artist,

I have learned who to trust

and make art out of dust and old-multi-colored rust.

Author's Note

:) I don't want any comments on the rhythm and meter. I really don't. I know that it' bad, the rhythm and meter. Lol.

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

I can only agree with Michael and sy that you really need to stop forcing the rhymes...They do not matter as long as the verse flows...This was still pretty damn good though. I think you need to put the word 'ONE' in where you say...going to be the that saved me....and should it be 'tasty DEPTHS OF ice cream? Sorry if I seem picky...only trying to help

[Melody]

Oh no, you're quite right. The only reason I'm focusing on rhyming is so I can get my rhyming more developed. I'm not very good at rhyming, so I thought I'd work on it. Rhyming is the one thing that..well..just doesn't really work well for me. Lol.
Ahh...So those were the errors...Lol. I looked over it and over it and couldn't figure it out. Now that you've said which, I see where they are. Lol.
You're not being picky at all, thank you very much Dr.Wood.

[Sam Gregory]

Very interesting write indeed, the topic was cool and one we havent seen from you before so thats good.

[Melody]

Thank you. :) And that's what I wanted.

[Whiskurz]

You are indeed an artist my friend.....and poetry ia an art form that can heal all wounds......Bravo......Whisk

[Melody]

Thank you Whisk. :)

[Michael G.]

All in all an enjoyable read. Your content and storyline are good and you stayed with it throughout.
Well done.

(You don't always have to explain the what or the why of a poem or story. Let them stand on their own and let the reader judge them on their own merit.
Don't worry about rhythm and meter. Let your words make their own rhythm and you'll find being an artist in your craft can be a lot of fun!)

[Melody]

:D Thank you! I will put that advice into my brain, lol. :) Thank you thank you thank you! :)

[Michael G.]

You're welcome.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Welp I liked it. Few errors I'll message ya 'em but overall Great! Awesome job and a good story in the poem

[Melody]

Thank you. AGH! Errors! DX lol. Okay.