The RedRum Of Everything In Me

This time I haven't caught up...

I'm stripped down of any real feeling.

I'm living in solid vividness and dullness.

Slow dancing to the unknown rhythm of my erratic thoughts

And for some abhorred reason I'm loving this.

Maybe it's because I'm a ghost or maybe it's because I don’t think about being alive,

But I've always had a will to blacken the warped shades of blue in my mind.

The moonlight intertwined with the dark night and it shines a light too heavenly to exist in me.

Rain is delighted to soften the bustling streets and

Life made it seem like it could catch bullets with its teeth.

I should have noticed the crimson seeping through my shirt.

Fog strewn across my eyelids, weighing them down.

Maybe if I braced for it, it wouldn't have hurt.

Reviews

[Riddhi]

Personally , i can easily attach myself to this poem...it exactly suits me!!!! I am really thankful to you for writing such a nice poem which is so full of meaning....Another nice poem...eager to read your next writing...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
Riddhi

[Isabel]

Good to know you find it relatable! Thanks for the comment!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Painful indeed. Emotions out in the open.
Love these lines:

"I should have noticed the crimson seeping through my shirt.
Fog strewn across my eyelids, weighing them down.
Maybe if I braced for it, it wouldn't have hurt."

[AaronFreitas]

I love this write Maria! I love the detail in the descriptions and the way you can feel the raw emotion in it.
"Slow dancing to the unknown rhythm of my erratic thoughts
And for some abhorred reason I'm loving this."
I loved those two lines... it puts everything into perspective on how sometimes we move to our own rhythm of life and not the one that is moving all around us. Beautiful words :)

[Isabel]

Your interpretations are always interesting. Thanks for the review!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

This strikes me as a very personal poem. I suffer from anxiety and feel this in my very bones. one line really called out to me " Slow dancing to the unknown rhythm of my erratic thoughts" powerful stuff. Wonderfully honest and personal with out seeming false or forced. Great Job

[Isabel]

Thank you! I appreciate your review!