Ode to an Angel

Everything came crashing down

When I thought the war was done

And maybe the light had fully won

I too soon learned that the enemy

Still had his claws ready to strike

Wrapping them around my feeble neck

Making me suffocate

Not able to vent my many woes

 

So I bent down and prayed

"God please, God please

Send someone to help me!"

So Father broke the enemy's grip

Leaving me gasping for breath

Needing to speak

Lest I die from my own pain

 

Then He sent me you

And all my carefully composed

(yet equally broken) pieces

Scattered at your feet

As I cried to you

Vulnerable and weak

And..you actually wanted to help me

You wanted to hear me

To tell me God'll heal me

And you'll never ever leave...

Do you know how much that means?

To have someone truly care?

It lightens the load

Just enough to help me go on

 

You make me laugh

At our shared madness

And imaginary adventures

That we go on

Even through miles of distance

You make me cry

When you tell me I'm strong

When you tell me I'm beautiful

To die for even

It's crazy to hear that...for me

 

You're more than a friend

You're a brother

A guardian angel

I love you so much

Thank you for all you've done

Author's Note

This is just a thank you to my friend:') I really neede someone like him, and God is so good to have let me meet him. We're not in love, we're just friends...but its better that way:)

Reviews

[gloomysundays]

This is a very nice poem. It's riddled with spelling and grammatical errors as simple as tons of missing commas and periods. Every other poem I find always has the same problem of capitalizing every new line, regardless of it being the beginning of a sentence (not that it's easy to tell with you not using any punctuation). I still think that the feeling and imagery came across beautifully. It wasn't well-written but it was very well-expressed. With some minor editing, it could be perfect.

Good luck and happy writing.

Cheers!
74/100

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you for the suggestions (though with the capitalization, I know they aren't new sentences: it's just my poetry style). I'm not a very gramatically correct person when I write poetry, but I'll look into what you pointed out
God Bless

[Kris]

A few mistakes:
crashing - 1st stanza; 1st line
I, too, soon - 1st stanza; 4th line
God, please - 2nd stanza; 2nd line
pieces - 3rd stanza; 3rd line
vulnerable - 3rd stanza; 6th line

I understand if it is part of your poetry style, and I totally respect that.

This is beautifully written and touching. I can feel strong emotions behind this piece. You have a wonderful way of words. Keep writing!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you very much(: And I'll be sure to fix those
God Bless

[Soul Fire]

Wow, so wonderful. So glad God's placed a wonderful young man into your life. And being friends is more than enough.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you lovely(:
God bless

[Soul Fire]

You're welcome, God bless

[Craba]

oh wow this is so touching and sweet. Beautiful

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you do much:)
God bless

[Ice]

The bonds that we can form with people that aren't even close to being our family is amazing :) This is a beautiful piece!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you Ice:)
God Bless
~Mickey:)

[Ice]

welcome! >w

[Tai Ryens]

Well, I hope your friend likes this.

[Pax]

that's so sweet.....friendship is a very special bond two or more people shared...its like a treasure's worth...a heartfelt piece my friend!!!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Thank you:)