Building Mountains

I abandoned them all
Architects and engineers
I wanted none of their fears
For my dear mountain, tall.

I wanted a path to walk
A fine hill to climb,
For it was my own time
To shine among the flock.

Their advice plagued me
Don’t do this, don’t do that,
No single answer would suffice.
So I reneged against them
For I could not find any reason
Or method to please them.

So I cast them away,
To start anew again,
And keenly hoped let bravery pay
For so few I held  in close esteem.

I built her strong and sturdy
And let nature take it’s course,
For I knew they were wrong
I sewed those seeds with force
And hoped that they would grow.

In the winter a rushy beard,
Grew upon the northern slopes
And I stared at those hills long,
And I did not moan nor mope
For fate had come along
And given me natures beauty.

Now when they come to look
With faces glum and stare into my shuck
And say “Oh, what hungry hills they are”
I hear and is my heart not badly shook.

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

It seems to me that this is your message to the world in a way telling it to f*** off, because you are capable of building your life the way you want it. It is an excellent metaphor and I think you sum it up nicely with,
"And I did not moan nor mope
For fate had come along" - things will be the way they were meant to be; let nature take its course.

Nicely done.

[EMW]

I like this. I like how it basically says we choose our own destiny.

[Romeion Case]

You already know i'm a huge fan of you're work so you can do nothing wrong by me. good job as always and wonderful imagery. strong and resolute....

[Coyote Poetry]

Some people can see beautiful mountains and great oceans. Some people see a new city and a place to drill for oil. I like the man who see the rivers and the mountains as places to roam and find peace. I like this poem. It made me wish to be encircle in the gift of nature. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Jessica]

I love this :) Great job with the imagery.

[wolfshrew]

every stanza had a line that shined for me and made me feel
this mutual feeling between reader and writer, it was nice.
you certainly have a talent.

beautifully written

[emily joe]

I like this a lot.

[Dinesh Sairam]

Lol, it's like you're saying "I know how to build my own poems. Don't criticize me" or something like that :D Just kidding.

These kind of poems are hardly bad, I mean the positive and uplifting ones. At least I find myself not able to critique one.

A wonderful poem.

Keep writing.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a unique and engaging walk with one who nurtures in his own steadfast way~ one who trusts in his own abilities~ well composed poetic~