We were in love

We were in love

Why'd you leave?
I ask this every day
I never get an answer back
I still ask anyway

We were so close
I loved you so much
I guess in the end
It wasn't enough

I held you tight
I never wanted to let go
I felt you slipping away
I told myself it wasn't so

You promised you'd never leave
I thought you'd never lie
But in the end
It was you that chose goodbye

I still cry for you
I can't believe you're gone
Was it something I did?
Did I say something wrong?

You told me you loved me
You said you'd cry if I left
But in the end
It was only I that wept

I asked if it was my fault
You said, "it's not you, it's me"
I replay these words
But I still don't believe

Where did it go wrong?
You said it would always be us
When it was you and I
We were so in love

Why'd you leave?
I still ask this every day
I never get an answer back
I still ask anyway

Author's Note

Reviews

[L.Edward]

Stirring the old pot of memories there. Breaking up is hard to do. Oh, that old line "its not you its me," man what a heartbreaker and a ball breaker. A cop out really, a sense of false matydom. To make people feel better about the fact they have just sccoped out your heart. Making out like they have done you a favour. Plain old cop out.

[MikeV]

Thank you! :)

[L.Edward]

Your welcome brother. That's what it all about!

[mark]

great poem.
full of emotion and very sad piece i enjoyed reading it though.
very heartfelt write.
well done

[MikeV]

Thank you very much, my friend :) i appreciate your kind words

[mark]

no worries mate

[Aziz Luther]

I like the poem. A moment after a break up when the thought is not moving on but stuck on why. I liked how how stuck to that moment of sadness, before accepting its over and moving on

[MikeV]

Thank you very much :) I'm so happy you enjoyed

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Awwwwwww. You penned a great piece. Though the language used is very simple, it works best with the depth of the emotions. You achieved a really heartfelt finish when you used the first stanza as your ending. Although the rhymes are so common, you dignified them to the extreme.

Love lost is always one of the most heartbreaking topics a person can write about. And you did a great job on this. :x

[MikeV]

Thank you very much! :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This has a song feel of a write as I read down the lines...with the one stanza in the beginning and end of this verse:

Why'd you leave?
I still ask this every day
I never get an answer back
I still ask anyway

[MikeV]

Thank you so much! I actually came up with this
while listening to an instrumental
Which I'm adding today :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I see...you're welcome...

[Barbara Walker]

Your words convey your intent so well. Love the flow and rhythm to this piece. A universal theme that many can identify with, though that makes it no less hurtful for you. Though all the stanza are great, my favorite is the sixth stanza.

[MikeV]

Thank you so much! If i send a read request again for this
its because i finally got the instrumental to upload
the instrumental inspired me for this piece, and if you read it slowly while reading
its so much more emotional
thank you so much for liking my piece, it truly warms
my heart :)

[Frieda P]

The frustration and agony of losing someone you adore is palpable on your page Mike, loss is such a difficult thing to wrap our heads around, especially when we love someone so deeply, there are never any good answers, lovely work here.

[MikeV]

Thank you so much, my friend that made me laugh so much :)

[Frieda P]

Stop trying to confuzzle me, I had to read your reply twice, I was like ftw I was being dead serious here, then I realized what you meant lol ;-) My pleasure...

[MikeV]

Lol again, thank you so much! :)

[Frieda P]

I'll code my responses from now on, S for serious S is for sarcastic, that should be easy enough to decipher ;-P

[MikeV]

Lmao you're too funny

[wordwarrior]

I just love this Mike and I always love the power of a beginning verse repeating itself at the end. It doesn't always work but sure does with this poem. It brings the reader back to that emotional question that your poem is all about.
I hope this isn't true, but if it is, you deserve the best!
A very emotional poem, wonderfully written

[MikeV]

Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed :)
Nah, i just came up with the idea when i was listening
to an instrumental
thank you so much for your kind wishes though :)

[MikeV]

I'm gonna try again tomorrow. to upload the instrumental that inspired
me to write this. If you hear it while reading the poem slowly at the same time
it makes it so much more beautiful

[wordwarrior]

Sounds wonderful Mike!

[Sami Khalil]

A very emotive write with lover's tears and agony ...I hope things will turn out better in the future...:)

[MikeV]

Thank you Sami! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Heather]

this is sweet, sad and beautifully written, great job!! :D

[MikeV]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Heather]

you're welcome i enjoy great pieces!! :)