It started with a hug

The concept of the importance of a hug, was what gave me the idea to write this

Outside the window
The little boy stares
He has no one to hold
No one who cares

His dads always gone
His moms in the earth
He's an only son
His mom died at his birth

"Is it my fault that you're gone?"
" is that why daddy doesn't love me?"
"Was it something, I did wrong?"
"Why won't daddy hug me?"

The little boy pulls his hands apart
Just as he does each night
The he touches his heart
And awaits a reply

His dad who had just arrived
Heard his little boys prayers
As tears filled his eyes
He whispers through the air

"It was never your fault, that mommy died"
" I'm sorry I don't show that I love you enough"
" son, I love you more then life"
"Now, come and give me a hug"

The little boy turned with a start
And began to run
Lifted, his hand from his heart
And whispered "thank you mom"

Reviews

[wordwarrior]

Wow Mike, this is so sad, yet such a beautiful ending. I love the flow of this and the thoughts you have penned are very thought provoking. We don't realise in our own sadness, that others also need comfort and when they don't get that comfort, assume that everything must be their fault.
This is just beautiful

[MikeV]

Thank you so much! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it

[mark]

i like this one mike. its a pretty sad story.
great rhyming and nicely written.
great start to end well done dude

[MikeV]

Thanks man, I'm tryin to think of somethin brutally
sad to write, but its tough

[mark]

ur doin well now lol its sad enough
the watch almost made my gf cry lol
i think they r sad enough haha

[MikeV]

Thanks, i really appreciate that! :)

[mark]

no problem

[SyberRose]

A touching piece...nicely penned and heartrending...Enjoyed Mike and loved your childrens photos...Rose

[MikeV]

Thank you so much Rose! :) for the review of my poem and for taking
the time to see my kiddos

[Lydia Shutter]

Overwhelmingly sad words here, Mike, but the ending is so lovely. Well written. Lydi**

[MikeV]

Thank you so much! :)

[L.Edward]

Wow! Thats the most genuinely touching thing Ive read so far on Writer's. The raw honesty gets me. Beautiful ending.

[MikeV]

Thank you, your review put a smile on my face :)

[L.Edward]

Happy to hear it brother.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Wow this is an amazing peace a truly touching tale about a little boy.
I truly enjoyed this one very emotional, sad and moving.
Once again i love the way it flows and the rhyming scheme.
I love the way it ended to well written :)

[MikeV]

Thank you very much! :)
I gotta admit, i think so much in rhyme that
sometimes when i talk i naturally start rhyming :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

hahhahaha really that's funny :) A true rapper kind of does that. Rapping is awesome
:)

[Frieda P]

OMG Mike, you're killing me here, you own my tears right now...so touching and sweet, an amazingly emotive read. Kudos!

[MikeV]

Thank you so much my friend! :) I'm glad I have you in tears
But I also feel bad :p

[Michael G. Smith]

Sweet little story, a hug is such a special thing. I make sure to hug my children every time I see them.

[MikeV]

Thank you! :) my son gave me a hug when he got out of school
And it got me thinkin, how sad would he be if he had no one to hug
Then my pen went to town :)

[Michael G. Smith]

Cool, but I realized the poem ends with hug. Lol

[MikeV]

Actually the end was the little boy whispering
Thank you mom
The idea came from a hug
But the story was about a little boys prayers being
answered

[Michael G. Smith]

Ik I was messing with ya.

[MikeV]

:) I don't like bein toyed with Jk lol

[ms. barrie]

Wow, this is so touching, endearing, MikeV. You captured the guilt,
Abandonment of how a child might feel from first loosing a parent
And the other one not showing them enough love, with profound imagery,
And honesty. Wonderful use of rhymes and meter. The icing on the
The cake was the ending, the father's realization of being emotionally
absent and rectifying it. Brilliant write, thanks for sharing! :)

[MikeV]

Thank you very much! :)
Thank you for noticing the elements of the write :)