Open Heart

This is a poem I wrote about how I felt in the months following my Father's sudden death. I hope that people who have had a loved one die unexpectedly as I have can relate to at least some of this.

I should've known
That if I opened up my heart
It'd be wrenched apart
Because this nightmare is just too real
But at the same time too surreal
It'd always been a fear in the back of my mind
How could I have been so blind?
To not see that this nightmare was inevitable
I built my life on a fragile fantasy
And now it's all falling to pieces
My castle's walls are crumbling down
And I'm lying in the ruins crying
Almost dying, but still trying
You left one last time leaving me behind
I'd try to follow you
But it's not what you'd have wanted me to do
So I'll keep on trying, even though I want give in
I still won't let life win
So don't you worry, I'll be fine someday
After all, time washes everything away
A broken heart, a crumbling castle
Is that all I am?
It doesn't matter, I'll get better
Find something sturdier to build my life on
Rest in peace, I'll be fine

Author's Note

Please no hateful reviews, although constructive criticism is welcome. Thank you for taking the time to read my writing, I hope it was enjoyable.

Reviews

[NoelHC]

First, my condolences on the loss of your father, it is always hard to deal with that, and I expect he would have been young, as you are a middle school student.
This poem is eloquent and written very well, I would have thought you were older than that, based on the quality of your work.
Well done.

[Bee]

Thank you for your review, I'm happy to know that you liked my poem. I was young when it happened just a little over a year ago and still am, but I have done my best to keep going, as has the rest of my family. I am grateful to receive your compliments and condolences and hope that you will succeed in your own endeavors.

[CurlyBooks]

This poem is so full of emotion, it is amazing. It does remind me of when my grandmother died, although she had been I'll for some time, so the feelings and shock were not so severe, there was still the feeling of crumbling to nothing. This poem describes that perfectly. Thank you for this amazing poem.

[Bee]

Thank you, I'm sorry to hear about your grandmother, the death of family is always hard, sudden or not. I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem, and I hope to see more of your writing soon as well.