Lost, Left or Dead?

Take my hand.
Walk down this barren road of
Crushed hearts,
Shattered dreams, and
Lost souls.

Lost.
Lost, we are.
Lost in my eyes.
Lost in my bleeding addiction.

Pull me from the depths of hell,
With a shallow kiss that means nothing.

Night falls without a sound.

Left.
Left, we are.
Left for dead.

Squeeze my hand tighter,
Pain helps.

The serene darkness surrounds.
Light attempts to flare,
Only to be swallowed by the dark.

Fall to your knees.
Raise my head,
Now kneeling before my impassive truth.

Don't fight your fate.
Look into my eyes.
Our death lullaby plays faintly in the background.

Dead.
Dead we are.

Author's Note

I am not really sure where I got this idea but I hope you like it. Tell me what you think and be honest :)

Reviews

[nigrum homonculus]

that first stanza is amazing! the emotion you bring to this piece is unreal.
too many lines in this i love seriously. you wrote this damn well.

[Speak in Silence]

Aw thank you, I am glad you like it :)

[Jazmen]

Sounds like a heavy addiction, in my opinion. this is very sad. it has a scummy film of drug induced psychosis, it's intriguing and presumably very honest. I'm only confused by the note of how you're not sure where this came from. Are you sure about that? When I was reading it, I felt like you were in the depths of sadness and anxiety, depression, you know.. the works of something evil, perhaps. Maybe it's through my own experience, I read what I wanted to read.
I enjoyed reading it nevertheless. Very nice work, friend.

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you, this is kinda sorta from experience. I'm kinda comparing love and death to an addiction. I hope that makes sense? :)

[Sam]

Great poem, really liked it :)

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[Sam]

No problem, really enjoyed reading it :)

[Speak in Silence]

I'm glad :)

[Fréyjä Helv..]

A beautifully description of their coming doom... Doomed they are and hopeless... Brilliant poem..

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A really cryptic poem that has my mind racing... i am thinking it is about two people who rely to heavily on each others support they can not make it in the real world alone.

[Speak in Silence]

Yes, you basically got it

[Chinchilla]

This piece really has depth. This is really good.

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[Chinchilla]

Your welcome. :)

[Gothic Girl]

i just love your style in making this great piece. Lost, Left or Dead? you gave each word descriptions. then the last stanzas made me smile. you ended with the proper conclusion. :)

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[Panda11598]

OMIGOSH! Love love love it! My favorite part is:
Squeeze my hand tighter, Pain helps.
I really don't know why that's my favorite part but when I got to that part I stopped reading and thought about those two lines.
Good job!

[Speak in Silence]

Haha thank you! ;D

[Panda11598]

No problem :)

[Taylor Ann]

I loved it. I could feel the raw emotion throughout the entire piece, and it told quite a story. Wonderful work, as always! ;D

[Speak in Silence]

aw thank you :)

[Taylor Ann]

Any time ;)

[That_Guy]

I love the first stanza. well done Miss Mayhem ;)

[Speak in Silence]

Thank you :)

[That_Guy]

thanks for sharing

[Speak in Silence]

no problem :)