Why

Why

A Poem by Mistaken
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dark and hate :) gothic woohoo lol jk

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Empty, hollow space

Is now what fills my chest

 

I gave you my heart

You took it and left

 

I stand there stunned

At what just happened

 

You ran with my heart

Still beating in your hand

 

Blood ran down your fingers

Dripping to the floor

 

A trail of tear-shaped drops

Lead to where you're hiding

 

I want to follow, but

I don't have the strength to

 

Why did you take it and run?

Why me?

 

What happened to the guy I once knew...

The guy that said "I love you"

 

© 2009 Mistaken


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The imagery is wonderful. A beating heart on a guy's palm, and there's a girl trying to give a chase--it's comical in a really dark way. I think it's insanely creative.

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love this, especially the imagery of the guy holding the heart in his hand and it dripping blood.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think this is a great poem about getting your heart broken
and the pain and confusion that follow.
I also really like the imagery you use.

Excellent poem!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love this its amazing i can relate

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

i think it was amazing. i liked it alot!!! yay you!!!! lol :D:d:D:d

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

nice poem!

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This poem speaks of actions that most people endure growing up. Falling for the wrong person and getting hurt in the end. I found the ending to be my favorite part. The ill fated words of "I love you." It was a good poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Hey...i think that is great...i already have asked this to myself...this is real?...anyway good poem...

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

very nice.
the imagery is what makes this a really good write

the last stanza doesnt seem to fit with the rest of it though.

all in all,
good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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