I'm No More

Suicide is such a b***h

 

Shoot, Shoot
goes the bullet through my head and the wall behind me
Bang, Bang
goes the shotgun blast right through my chest and now I'm nothing
Thud, Thud
is my body hitting the floor and blood everywhere you can see

and then silence
because no one cares and no one checks to see why I scream

Author's Note

Enjoy

Reviews

[Burr the Story Sorceres..]

First off, the last line is so wrong. I would come check on you if I heard you sneeze, for heaven's sake. Why? Cause you are the other half of my soul. You, my soul sister, has one piece, my heart sister has the other. My heart is sick and dying and the doctors don't know why. My soul is grieving and lost in the darkness. My mind, myself, can't find the damn matches or the Sailor Moon Band-Aides. We three are truly screwed, but we aren't alone.

As far as the poem, it is another great piece. I love how yours are short and to the point.

[Undying Glory]

wow this is powerful stuff, it's really nice. i suggest that maybe the gunshot sounds be placed on separate lines though, so the reader can feel the full force of each and every word. other than that great job

[K R I S]

I like it