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A Poem by Ana B.
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my first poem i ever wrote....

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  Why is the wind always crying?
  Singing trough the clouds his solemn song
  His lyrics demised through birds that are flying
  Its simple really - he has no  home...
 
 Why is the sun always shining?
 Blindfolding us with his glorious halo
 For we won't see what he's hiding
 Its simple really - he's always alone...
 
 Why is the  moon always singing?
 Like a coaxing siren  who'll never cease
 Gifting us with a quivering feeling
 Its simple really - she's lost her peace...
 
 Why we humans are living in denial?
 That the wind is homeless, the sun is alone
 Nobody's been never able to be impartial
 But before we have a chance to prove it to the world - we're gone..
 
...and then, all that's left is dust...
Carried by the wind, carresed by the sun
Without any reason this dust will be oust
Cause with no ending, nothing really began...

That way flows the spring of eternity
Limitless in the universe's plot
Its source is resting in eternal serenity
But we are nothing but the sky's dot...
 
   

© 2014 Ana B.


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Wonderful write as always.....................
I can say........ Very precious write here.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

:) thank you
A very meaningful poem... I liked the words you used... It really puts the reader into thinking....
'cause with no ending, nothing really began...' I just fell in love with this line,,,, so amazing.... So meaningful!!!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


A very meaningful poem... I liked the words you used... It really puts the reader into thinking....
'cause with no ending, nothing really began...' I just fell in love with this line,,,, so amazing.... So meaningful!!!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, you're very sweet Nene:)
I liked this poem.
" Why is the sun always shining?
Blindfolding us with his glorious halo
For we won't see what he's hiding
Its simple really - he's always alone...

Why is the moon always singing?
Like a coaxing siren who'll never cease
Gifting us with a quivering feeling
Its simple really - she's lost her peace..."
You left the reader with many things to think about. I like the use of the moon and the sun. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

Thank you for sharing beautiful words John.
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

You are welcome dear Ana.
Beautiful metaphors in this poem Ana... "Why we humans are living in denial? That the wind is homeless, the sun is alone." I love those lines. Great work Ana!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

Thank you Aaron :)
wonderfullll .................... great job writing this ana :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

Thanks Daisy :)
Oh wow, this poem is really beautiful! ;) I enjoyed it very much. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much Lyndy!
Great Ana, when all things come to pass they return to dust that's carried on the wind maybe for the sun or the moon the time must come, when this is applied to us we must rest in the dust as our souls find the eternity of peace, we are but dot's that pass this way, well written Ana as always :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much Richard for always being so kind ( and thank you about my pic ref :) )
R Smith

5 Years Ago

you're very welcome :)
I like the personification of the wind and the sun here. I note that you called the wind a 'he' and yet .. all the hurricanes and storms (wind driven) are named after women ...lol - Im teasing of course.

but for a first poem i think I would have been wondering if I wasnt a genius of something after finishing penning this - so advanced for a first write. I think it shows the potential you have inside you and the best is yet to come Ana B. - always remember that... let it flow

Loved the infinity reference - done with aplomb
"Cause with no ending, nothing really began...
That way flows the spring of eternity" - first class !!

I also loved the ending - the awareness of our insignificance in the grand scheme of things is humbling - we arent even a dot as you look beyond our solar system into the realms of systems, galaxies and the Universe itself. We are nothing lol.

Now look what you've done...I actually humbled lol
But this is a brilliant first poem (psst..I'd secretly be glad of writing this one now - but don't tell anyone)


Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

ha ha, i never had such a wonderful review as yours.....it makes me feel like i've reached the skies.. read more
very well written Ana....
"Limitless in the universe's plot
Its source is resting in eternal serenity
But we are nothing but the sky's dot".....
beautiful lines

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ana B.

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much Anurag.

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