SHE

a person, namely a girl is sad and grieved. the poem describes her

Her tears shine like gleaming pearls

like melted ice on a frozen glacier

like beads of sweat on a rosy face.

Her expression is like a sad grimace

like the faded shadow of a happy face

like the reflection of a peculiar spirit

Her voice is like a low cello

like the faded voice of a weary traveler

like the low notes of a sad tune

Her words are like the flow of water

like the earnest urge of a sentimental poet

like various aspects of an irresistible force

why is her grief tremendously effective

why, suggested by her ponderous face,

are the colors of love addressed to me

Author's Note

any comments....

Reviews

[Kasey Miriam]

I enjoyed reading this! I think it could use more punctuation for a few hard stops and direction for the reader. I like the similies that you used. The one thing I don't like as much is the word "creepy" it doesn't seem to fit very well into the poem.

[Moomal Ahmed]

uh ill change it to scary, or maybe intimidating, or strange, peculiar? what do u think

[Kasey Miriam]

Peculiar might work well