true romance

Now those words uncensored is that just die The Motion Pictures Asses or anyone with a free mind?

So this is how we met,

ain't no lame brain how I met your mother.

But good ole fashion luck,

Kicking my shoes up and you spin to ask

'Excuses me but do you mind?'



Look at you all serious,

cards in your hand,

and that curly Q your Marlboro made.

I fell in love.





And how fast did those feet move?

Did your heart just skip a beat?

One quick beat that skipped to two?

You know I was smilin at you,

no gin grin or nothin,

just watching you play against them men.




The smell of popcorn and cards

it's........................ a sweet blend,

even when your look cold at them people at the table.



Here I am just lovin this man,

aint shaved for three days,

but he had that smile that needed real company.





What are you like behind a closed door?

Not a card room love,

but the bed room.







































Take me to your room.




Show me true romance.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

well, now this one is kinda hot... not in that steam and throws of passion hot, but in that slow seductive, watchful predator hot... like he is calculating exactly what he wants to do to you and makes those sensual promises with his eyes.... he knows how he is all man, and respects the way you are all woman.. he wants to exploit those tantalizing qualities and use them to induce pleasures beyond imagination... watchful of her interactions with other men and appreciating her for her sexiness... yes... very hot indeed... enjoyed this one as well... wheeew...

[Diane]

Not sure if I can explain what I am thinking, but I am going to try. I like the two-sidedness. Using poker as a shadow of what is really happening.

[MoriartyMesa]

I should flag your comment on the fact hat no one should have to read my work. that being said if there is is anything i can and improve please share and tell me where i may improve.

[Diane]

Why flag my comment? I like the style, i just could not explain exactly what I was thinking. What was wrong with my review?

[MoriartyMesa]

Nothing was wrong with your review. I just never thought anyone would read my work. I was teasing you. In all honesty thank you for taking the time to read my work.

[Diane]

lol I reread it over and over and could think of what I said wrong. haha you are welcome.

[Diane]

Oh i was reading your other comments. you have nice collection of readers.

[MoriartyMesa]

your going to make me blush

[Diane]

haha make sure you share these. I am sure you will get more reviews.

[MoriartyMesa]

no one reads my work

[Diane]

look lower. there is a lot

[MoriartyMesa]

James Brown sang it better but this is what I came away withhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nMqAfg8pRRg

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

amazing as usual!!! you are so brilliant!

[Mark]

first... and sorry for this, I’m just Annoyed that April didn't send me a Read Request...



you have this authentic "here's looking at you, kid" feel to your writing that i really enjoy, the confidence and musings behind a revealing and telling smile made this poem in particular a joy to read (I love free verse, and you do it very well:)

Thank you for sharing

[writing mojo]

One of my favorite movies to say the least..interesting take on the connective tissue of cinema to live action interpretation...you cast your motion pictures well..

[misha]

A very interesting piece. Great job!

[B. Maaitah]

you've narrated the story and described the ambience in just enough words to incite anyone's imagination and put them right there in the room ! every line fell into its right place.. your poem is effortless yet very skillfully woven.. had the right amount of naughty, and the right amount of "true romance" if you want.. great job! :)

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Very impressionistic feel to this piece...it was very interesting.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Interesting And cute how you Described
the characters like a story or a old picture movie.


Like the movies you'd what and listen to next to
your car I loved those as a child they're not
around much no more.


Felt like the 60's and 50's feel to it
thank you for sharing loved it.


Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet