Who Knows

This place

is filled with

These people

that have

Those faces

you’ll never forget

You

You were from that place

with all these people

that had those faces

you’d never forget

but

me

i was in that place

with you

among the people

who had those faces

you could never forget

yet…

you forgot mine

Reviews

[M. George]

Really well done and relatable!

I love the repetition and how it's suddenly broken off at the end in such a blunt manner. I thought the lack of capitalisation as the poem went on was clever, too - it gave me the impression the voice was becoming more distanced, or tired, giving an indication as to what will come next. The vagueness of "this place", "these people" and "those faces" definitely helps connect with the message more. Good job! :)

[Andrew M Parker]

Wow thank you! I'm glad you think I did a good job :D The voice was getting quieter, yes.

[Molly K]

I really enjoy your poems.

This one especially, I love the constant repitition and how it changes so suddenly at the end. I also really like the pace you've given it by making the lines so short.

Great piece!

[Andrew M Parker]

Thanks so much :D I really enjoyed writing this one. Sad and full of hurt, but as I think about it, I shrug my shoulders now. I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.