To build heaven

Cascade

We need Gods to come down to build heaven on earth,
It takes only a religion to make the world a hell.
The stream of human-flow passes on.

Life is reduced to desperation by wars of hate,
along the edges of no man's land settle refugees.
we need Gods to come down to build heaven on earth.

Being a girl is a curse in many a place, their childhood robbed,
she is nothing but a toy for men to break and discard.
It takes only a religion to make the world a hell.

The homeless under the bridge a permanent exhibit,
The skyscrapers along the waterfront an advertisement for cities' wealth.
The stream of human-flow passes on.

Author's Note

Cascade, a form of poetry created by Udit Bhatia.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

This really touched me. Highlighting those who suffer from misfortune and also confirming what I have thought for sometime, that religion at times can create hell on earth. Thank you for highlighting the plight of those who suffer. There is such unfairness in this world, and that is misery for many. Well written

Chris

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Chris, for your most encouraging words, I appreciate them very much.

[Chris Shaw]

Lovely poem. Pleased to have found it.

[Samuel Dickens]

There is so much unfairness and inequality in this world, despite religion and people with good hearts. Hatred, fear and greed seems to be winning, but not always will it be so, I pray.

[Mrudula Rani]

I join in the prayer with you in wishing for better days for humanity. Thank you.

[Cheyanne Wheeler]

I love the repetition of certain phrases like "It takes only a religion to make the world a hell". Makes the poem easier to understand as a whole.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you for reading. I appreciate your review.

[barleygirl]

Not familiar with this particular poetic form, but I’ve seen others that are similar in repeating lines from stanza to stanza. Sometimes such repetition seems to be done only to satisfy the form. But in your poem, the repeating lines flow naturally with the message you are conveying. I very much love the examples you choose to illustrate the brokenness of our world. These are the same things I feel so bad about every day, things that make me feel so fortunate for my life, despite my struggles. I agree that only God & prayer can be the way to find an answer, becuz humans just ain’t getting it right! Your heart is much appreciated here as you share it in your writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Mrudula Rani]

Querida, love your reviews ( all your reviews of other writers also), and when you take time out, I miss you very much. Thank you for your wonderful words. Wish you all the best and lots of love. Um beijo grande.

[Beccy]

Yes, we do need Gods to come down. Our species is on a rocky road to ruin; has been for a long time now and in today's sound bite world of unbridled consumerism, it gets worse by the day.

It seems to me that the desire to take action and halt the evil that man is inflicting on his fellows, has been replaced by mere tut tutting and hand wringing, that lasts no longer than a commercial break. One day perhaps, we may come to our senses, but truly, I am not holding my breath.

Your poem speaks loud.


Beccy.

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you for your wonderful thoughts on my poem.

[CD Campbell]

This is a very powerful poem. It's written in a form I do not recognize, but I like the look of it. It makes me sad concerning the subjects you so eloquently described. This world is fast becoming a hell of our own doing where no one is innocent. Excellent work. CD

[Mrudula Rani]

The world we see through the events that are unfolding every day are truly horrific. Often leaves us helpless. Thank you for reading . Cascade is an invented form of poetry. Glad you liked it.

[CD Campbell]

I read your authors note. All forms are made up somewhere. Created a few of my own, but they bombed.

[Mrudula Rani]

I doubt that your forms bombed, Probably they were too clever!

[Paul Bell]

21st century. Has anything changed, no?
Western countries create weapons for poor countries to test out.
You just know the United Nations are having an emergency meeting to fix all this.

[Mrudula Rani]

United Nations is just an ornamental organization. Where You can't even raise a human rights question.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Well constructed and nicely executed.
A work of pure poetry!

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you Jimmy Yetts. I am so glad you are back, I hope you are doing well.

[Neville]

and this pleading, it flows like a wordfull waterfall.... and how very true these words indeed are, yet such a pity there is the need to record them.... it does make me sad too my dear friend and poet Mrudula.... Neville

[Mrudula Rani]

Thank you dear Neville for your very thoughtful words. I appreciate you reading mine. Uma abraço.

[Neville]

I hope you know tis my pleasure.... N