Message in a Bottle

Message in a Bottle

A Poem by Serendipity
"

I hope this message finds you soon.

"

To my sweetheart,

 

I don't know when you will get this.

But I hope this message finds you soon.

I have not stopped thinking about you.

Your words are imprinted in my heart.

I am lost in a daydream of you.

Waiting patiently for your return.

Wondering when you will get here.

To our secluded spot deep in the woods.

The moon hides behind dark clouds.

The night is so eerie without you.

The cabin is so cold in your absence.

The candles have burned out.

The fire is almost gone.

I am waiting patiently for you.

I can't help but cry fearing the worst.

My heart can't take another night.

In this place, completely alone.

Without you by my side.

Please find me my sweetheart.

I need you to survive.

But as I write all this.

I wonder, do you feel the same?

Does your heart love me?

Like mine loves you.

Until your return, I will hope.

I will dream of your gentleness.

I will love you with my words.

Can you see how much I do?

 

Yours ... Truly, deeply.

 

March 12, 2008

 

© 2008 Serendipity


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Simply beautiful, like the sunrise after a bitter cold night. I could not help but feel as if I had stumbled across your note and read something so personal and deep. Wondering as well what would happen next; hoping you would write of the response. So profound and pure. Only wish there was more....

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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I thought this was very good. It has great imagery and it flows like wine at a bacchanalia. Very deep and powerful words make this hard to forget. I am glad you suggested this one.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Perhaps this should be called " Message on a Screen." :) This was such a gentle whisper to please come back. I loved it. Rain..

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Kay
There is only one world that could describe this poem, beautiful. I say this because this poem makes you feel the pain (not like emo but the aching) It is hard to find a poem that actually tugs at your heart but I must say this poem has done it. I really hope to see more from you!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is very beautiful.
Very Well Written.
Excellent expression of emotions.
Emptiness and heartache.
I know these very well.
This piece is warming.
Very tender.
Full of love.
Your words are very sweet.
I can feel the hopefullness within them.
Extremely amazing piece of work!
Brilliant Job!
^_^

Posted 16 Years Ago


This is areally beautiful write for your loved one, very well written.

Posted 16 Years Ago


To await for a loved one to return and hope that they do is a lonely and helpless filling, keeping hope is the only way to hold onto sanity... your poem very well expresses all the mixed emotions of such a difficult situation.
Really loved it!!

Posted 16 Years Ago



Beauty is the sun dancing in her hair!
Beauty is the Moonlight in her eyes!
Beauty is watching you dance by a river bed!
Beauty is seeing her face light up with every word!
Beauty is not how she looks but how she feels!
Beauty is all those reasons and much more!
What is Beauty?
Beauty is you!

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Simply beautiful, like the sunrise after a bitter cold night. I could not help but feel as if I had stumbled across your note and read something so personal and deep. Wondering as well what would happen next; hoping you would write of the response. So profound and pure. Only wish there was more....

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.


Your poem is as warm and tantalizing as the descriptions you've included. The emptiness of heartache cannot be measured but it is surely described in kind detail in your words.

Nicely inspiring.

Daniel

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I feel your warmth, sincerity and yearning for this love you hold deep within yourself, your words so gentle and flowing perfectly on the page. Hope they come soon, so you can love them with yourself rather then your words, words can be so lonely and incomplete at times.
Antony

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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