Canvas

Painting the canvas of my life

Brush stokes uneven

As I try to rush though

Missing spots

Splattering paint

On the canvas of

Others lives

Finishing

I realize

I should’ve

Taken my time

 

-Mysty Rayn

 

Reviews

[Antony]

Great metaphor with this, leaving our colors on someones life and not always to perfection, there are no perfect artists, and although we can't remove permenant paint, we can always do a better job the next time, of being more careful how we present our colors to others. This is a great piece Mysty.
Antony

[Kristin Brecoe]

this is great. i think i like this one more than the other. it holds something strong. its more of a lesson than the other one; whereas, its just a poem that tells others you are now a part of them. but i like both.

-kristin

[Ms Jessica Renee]

Love the metaphors, especially with the painting and canvas aspect. Life is just like that, it is empty at first but slowly and sometimes fast, we add to it. In the end we have created a masterpiece of hopes, fears, regrets, and accomplishments. Well written, I enjoyed it and thanks for sharing it with me.

[Pax Analog]

Perhaps. Or maybe we should splatter more paint more rapidly, a la Pollock. ;-) Devil's advocate leaped out. Tho' in truth, your "care" emphasis is probably more important most of the time. I guess I was thinking of the stubborn ditherers in life, the ones I've been a little too exposed to. One wants to splatter in those instances.

Ah, I'm thinking there is a difference between cautious care and radical care. Something like the discipline of martial art vs. the clerk's attention to detail.

Is this canvas a naturalistic portrait, surreal, abstract, cubist? -- you get my paradoxical bent.

Ultimately, taking one's time turns into Buddha-Mind, the entire automatic projectionistic mechanism of conventional self seen through.

I hope you do a series with the painting canvas metaphor. There's a lot to be plumbed there. Thanks for the stimulus!

[chord0]

How to paint better? take your time to do a great job and do better next time. Wonderful message, great poem!
chord0

[Adela Muresan]

Kowel.
I absolutely love it - the imagery and the conclusion in the end, are fabulous.
*****Poem.

A.M.

[Dani California]

I love this Mysty! This is such a profound piece. I love the paint and canvas metaphor... brilliant.
Wow, you've touched on many things here. Rushing through ... not making sound decisions... our choices effect not only us but those around us... should have, would have, could have....

This is an awesome write!

[vindictivesunshine]

A life of chaos and splattered permanency. The brush like God's finger, is fate. Great piece of work.
Loved the imagery of canvas and paint.

[Brianna Brie]

Splattering paint
On the canvas of
Others lives

I like the thought above. How true it is. Wonderfully written!

[Angel's Lady]

Wow, I like this very much! Great write.

Painting the canvas of my life -- How perfectly written...