Bittersweet Steps

Again my path ahead is divided. And it's time to chose a route again.

Looking at the path ahead,

But I want to turn back instead.

The road is  broken either way,

Why I want to go back I cannot say.

 

Two steps forward and one step back.

 

There is a great weakness in my heart,

But it's only because it's being torn apart.

There's two paths ahead for a second time,

Why does choosing feel like such a crime?

 

Two steps forward and one step back.

 

Either way I say goodbye,

But there's a chance that it's a lie.

I'm not sure what I should do,

I really wish I knew.

 

Two steps forward and one step back.

 

It's a bittersweet path to life,

But I'll have to get through this second strife.

I'll fight to make it as I always do,

Because I can see just how much I grew.

 

Two steps forward and one step back.

 

I'll force myself to walk with pride,

Making sure I'm confident with every stride.

Whatever I choose I know is right,

Like the phoenix I'll take flight.

 

Two steps forward and one step back.

 

I take my two steps forward,

But I'm not traveling homeward.

Then I take one step back,

Because fear is somthing I never lack.

 

Two steps forward and one step back.

Author's Note

Think of the grey words as a whisper.

Let me know what you thought.

Reviews

[B Wayne]

I totally agree with the comment that these are very good lyrics and I also agree with removing "But" from the second lines in the first few stanzas. It's not neaded at all and actually sounds better, well, at least to me it does.

Very good, I'll have to read the others to let you know if it's my favorite or not.

B

[Wolfwind Words]

OMG I love it! Call me crazy but this is a song just waiting to be born!
The theme is one that has become common in todays chaotic life. I think it could easily take off and run.
I think that a whisper is good for the grey lines, but I think a shout would be better.

A upbeat tempo, it would be wonderful song. I could see it as a theme for a movie or something like that.

Ok...Here's what brought me to think it would be a good song. As I read this, I was listening to the theme song from the movie "Fletch" (If you've never seen it, You should It's hilarious!) Anyways, I saw your rhyming words matching the tempo of the song. The only thing I would could suggest is adapt the 3rd and forth stanza into a chorus.

As a piece of poetry, I like it's overal flow. One suggestion to smooth it out just a tad bit, would be to removed the "But" "And" and "So" from the lines, I felt they just added words that took away from the meaning.

Ok I'm done rambling... Wonderful piece! I really enjoyed the experience. :)

Aaron Maycroft