Electric Lust

Men will be the death of me.

Attached so easily to them
Like magnets with an electric pull
That's charged perfectly to my voltage
Enough to make me withstand the static shock

They electrify me so easily
I can feel the crackling of their energy
It jumps out like a spark to lick my skin
Causing unspoken thoughts to buzz wildly

Tempted so easily by them
Like the lone tree to the lighting
I want to set them ablaze
And feel their responding heat

They wound me so easily
Despite reading DANGER I grab the power line
It runs through the currents of my veins
Causing me to jolt in pain and pleasure

Defeated so easily by them
Like a surge to an unequipped outlet
I hope that eventually one day I'll learn
And prevent them from frying my circuits

Author's Note

I gotta say, I've had an unusual amount of luck attracting the flirtations of guys who are already taken. What gives?

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

You know I find more women attracted to me when I am taken... I think it is a confidence of being loved.


They wound me so easily
Despite reading DANGER I grab the power line
It runs through the currents of my veins
Causing me to jolt in pain and pleasure

Nicely worded.

[Wolfwind Words]

Don't give up hope Nikki. Each experience teaches us something and makes us stronger for the path that we are walking. Frustrating as it can be. Keep faith that the next turn of the path will bring something that is what you need. That hope is what keeps us walking forward.

I loved the description of your poem here, it really got the point across. :)

Great Ink!
Wolfie

[i.am.the.sun.]

i've got this uncanny ability to find girls who are taken attractive before i even know they're taken. honestly i can more often then not bet on who's taken based on how attractive i find them (looks aside).
but this is a great poem :) i was unsure about it at first but it was a great read. i especially liked the crackling line, and the spark licking your skin, very visual. and not a bad image at that.

[John Stussy]

The forbidden fruit is often the one most desired, could be a big reason for the dual attractions. Either way, you portrayed the sensations of that dangerous position very well, your choice to use electricity to describe it seems fitting. It's lightning fast, unbelievably strong, completely irresistible, and can cause fires wherever it strikes. Great job.

[Forest Green]

This was sweet; a very unusual metaphoric illustration of the tangle of unreciprocated longing.

Nicely done...!

[Kerry O'Connor]

You have captured the energy of that electric spark which ignites an instant attraction, and the frustration of unrequited love is clearly felt.

Thank you for entering your poem in Kerry's Sunday Challenge #1