You

I wrote this for a contest

YOU

 

When I first opened my eyes I saw you,

You are gone when I really need you. 

Reviews

[Surya]

This is the terrible pain one can get...
It's short but with bag of emotions..
Thank you dear for sharing...

[Najam Us Saher]

Yes it hurts the most. Thank you

[Shasha]

Never thought that two lines can say the thing of hundred lines. Well written. Keep writing!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for your appreciation. :)

[Manu]

Nice, sweet and short piece.This piece emotes a lot.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much :)

[AshlynnStyx]

Cute its short and sweet...........

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you ☺

[AshlynnStyx]

You're welcome

[Valentine]

You totally lost me with this write. Sorry. Valentine

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you for reading. Glad you liked it.

[boygene borice]

Aaah, you left me in blues... two lines and the picture, and the message is such thick in head.
You are amazing

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh Thank you so much. You've made my day. 😀

[Giulia King]

I love the picture! 2 great lines but, I somehow feel like this should be longer? What happened?

[Najam Us Saher]

I wrote this for one line story contest.

[Sikandar Khan]

Nice Lines You Wrote It For Contest With The Memory And Feelings For Her...It Will Be More Good If You Add Talgine its about your mother and your feelings...

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you. I guess clever people can understand by the image. 😁

[Sikandar Khan]

your Weelcome
But This time your guess is wrong i dont guess any thing from pic because it does not show anything ti me but ur lines show ur feelings and i can understand these line and their meaning very well beacuse i can feel this lines your wrotw foe your mother because i know about your feelings for your mother..

[Najam Us Saher]

I spend time for choosing the pictures as well. I make sure that image suits my writing. You should really notice the picture as well.

[Sikandar Khan]

Ok I Will Try Next Time....

[Farhan Shaikh]

Short but strong words penned in it another good and another good luck for your contest, I really loved this one

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. I am glad you liked what I wrote for my mother.

[Farhan Shaikh]

I knew it by the image 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

Clever...!!! 😊