Chaos and champagne

Chaos and champagne

A Poem by Moonie
"

~just a little scribble~

"
Scattered rhymes would 
fill her poems,
And at times,  they would
resemble assembled
fluff pieces of spring snow, or
maybe you would know
that they were like thrown bridal
confetti coloured
in pink.
Or they would begin
to look like bubbles
bottled in champagne. 
Tottering about,
never settling,
startlingly confused and
over-used.
Would make you muse
on the broader futility
of order.

© 2014 Moonie


Author's Note

Moonie
This one is just a scribble.

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well ..this one is making me smile a bit wide ..because i certainty found myself here , it describes a beautiful silly feeling :-) and i like these lines '' Scattered rhymes would
fill her poems,
And at times, they would
resemble assembled'' it made the poem much more pretty as u gave it a nyc start nd i lyk the scribble ..it's something new frm ur collections ,very nyc write :-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

Oh, thanks babe! You always brighten up my page with your lovely comments! :))
Lenah Mehzabin

9 Years Ago

Aw! thats so sweet .My pleasure ;) . and ur poems are always impressive : )



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the little graphic there, which, I mean, that's risky business to me, sometimes those things ruin the thing, but your little picture or colors works. nice title. the poem made me think of the big bang or something, which is a nice thing to read about, or feel something for in a poem. nice scribbles.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

Ha, glad that graphic worked out! Thank you for such a lovely comment! Muchly appreciated! :)
More than just a scribble, I'd say. Beautiful images and language throughout.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

You are always so kind to me, ma'am!!!!!! I love your comments to the moon and back! :) :) Hugs! :)
ahaha! i love this very much .. every word .. little word bubbles, of that champagne, tickling the tongue :) the alliteration and rhyme are perfect .. i think this is a strong little "scribble" that broadens my smile with each re-reading .. nice job .. very intelligent, witty and enjoyable!
E.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

I am glad it gave you such a broad smile, dear E. Thanks for brightening up my day!!
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Sam
Well, a heck of a scribble then if I may say so.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

Ha, thanks a lot for that!! :) :)and yes, you have my full permission to say so!! :D
the broader futility of order. My favorite line. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

Oh my, thank you for taking time to read this. That is one of my favorites too. :) :)
aah this is another fun write.
now, since you admitted it, I can say it without fear of being rebuked. I did notice that sometimes, scattered rhymes would fill your poems and, at times, they would resemble assembled fluff pieces of spring snow or... but read the poem, that's what I think of your scribbles. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

Hehe, I knew I should have used "his poems" so as to dismiss all the comparisons. Thanks a lot for .. read more
Woody

9 Years Ago

yes it is a compliment. but I like my reviews to be different and, let's face it, silly.
hugs .. read more
Moonie

9 Years Ago

Those silly comments are my favorite!!! :):)
OMG, I love this one.
Puts a smile on my face. :D
Your poetry is always a sweet treat. Well done!


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

Aah, just what I needed! :)) thank you for the wonderful, wonderful comments. :)
Matching Socks

9 Years Ago

You're welcome! :))
well ..this one is making me smile a bit wide ..because i certainty found myself here , it describes a beautiful silly feeling :-) and i like these lines '' Scattered rhymes would
fill her poems,
And at times, they would
resemble assembled'' it made the poem much more pretty as u gave it a nyc start nd i lyk the scribble ..it's something new frm ur collections ,very nyc write :-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

9 Years Ago

Oh, thanks babe! You always brighten up my page with your lovely comments! :))
Lenah Mehzabin

9 Years Ago

Aw! thats so sweet .My pleasure ;) . and ur poems are always impressive : )

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