Hibernation Dream

Part of a series on seasons

A solitary snowy scenery lies there in sepulchral silence
Nothing stirs, nothing moves, there is not a trace of life

All there may once have been, it all seems to have died
 Now the wintery world lies there like dead, or dormant.

* * * * *

Meanwhile the world is wrapped in white
By whirling and twirling
Snowflakes slowly swirling
And softly swiveling round and round,
As they dreamily dance down,
Down towards the rimy ground
Where snow softly smothers every sound
Constructing cold cushioning covers that, albeit light,
Are effective still, and a phenomenon in winter rife,
Making sure no noise can disturb the sleep of life.
* * * * *
Created by the celestial crystals
Are miracles at which we marvel,
A winterly white wonderworld,
Wondrous and yet wonderful.
* * * * *

The world, though, decides to sleep away,
All of those wonderful white winter days,
And rather buries itself beneath
Ice and snow that serve as sheets.
* * * * *

Hence, the world misses out on
All its very own white winter wonders
Due to the annual hibernation
While we find nothing of which we were fonder.
* * * * *
But the world, well, so it seems,
Rather lies like dead, rather lies asleep,
Oblivious to the enchanting snowy scenery,
Maybe to dream of bewitching beauties
That can't possibly be prettier than these
Which the world will never get a chance to see
Because it is lost in its hibernation dream...
* * *

Author's Note

First and originally posted on Quizilla, 24th of December 2010
A brand-new version, each decide for themselves which version they prefer.
Dedicated to: Winter and its wondrous white wonders which I love.
First snow here today, which is why it is up 4 days before winter officially starts.

Reviews

[Sophie]

Brilliant alliteration! My favourite verse is actually the first one, they were all very good but that one verse stood out, so you had a great start. The last line is also very good, so you ended fantastically too!
This is 3 of 20 reviews for 1st in Emotional Poetry.

[Laura Maidah]

"Snowflakes slowly swirling
And softly swiveling round and round," has so much beautiful alliteration. It's delicious. Just rolls off the tongue. I wonder what this was inspired by exactly. Insomnia usually does it for me. Lol. Or a cool word/song. Anyways, thanks for another great read!

[Legolas]

Creates a vivid picture:) great job:)

[DESTROYA]

awesome poem! it has wonderful flow and energy.You created beautiful images in my mind and i liked the interesting structure of the poem, too. great piece!

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Beautiful! Brilliant poem!!

[Otsana]

The imagery in this poem is breathtaking, I can almost see it infront of me...I love snow too and you have really captured it's beauty.
I like how you have brought hibernation into the poem because it is so true that people and animals of course tend to hibernate during these times and it is a shame because it is truly beautiful and so is your poem...
Great job!

[Between the grey]

this has a lot of imagery and detail in it. I really enjoyed this, it's intriguing.

[∂αʌ<..]

i think this makes me think of christmas..definitely...but also it sounds like a fantasy dream wherein everywhere is white...and instead of white symbolising purity, perfection...its seems as if inyour poem..there is this tinge of imperfection ...or impurity tainting the perfect image your described! and strangely, it sounds so perfect...like it belong..it meant to be like that!

wondrous-writing! (*.*)

[Priscilla Sayers]

Clever, a gorgeous poem full of imagery and tickles the senses. I love that even though you say that winter causes every thing to be silent, still, "Rather lies like dead..." But then you speak of the beauty lost to the eyes of those in hibernation and then jump into the perspective of the hibernators... Whose dreams maybe even more beautiful than the scene that winter presents.
Great, love it!