Three Kisses

A poem about kissing.

The taste of tobacco.

The captain’s experienced hands,

attacking me from all sides.

Flat lips that say,

“You’re cute and I’m cute.”

That’s a good reason, right?

 

The smell of sweat in an empty bus.

The climber’s hands,

pinching and pulling.

Chapped lips that say,

“You’re cute and I’m cute.”

That’s a good reason, right?

 

The sound of the freeway.

Rain tapping on our foreheads.

The gamer’s hands locking with my own,

smiling lips that say

“Damn, you’re beautiful.”

That’s a good reason, right?

Author's Note

This is definitely a raw poem. Suggestions for improvement would be greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Going super old school, but I think the song and words reflect what you have written, so you tell them this, when the want to know the reason is https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AYUdldNzLNA

[Rossen]

Rough and shallow edges reflected back at leather clad romeos with loveless thoughts...
Romance breathes loves unfulfilled desires. Cleverly hidden by the writer
only need to ask that question once.

100/100

[K.N. Lorenzen]

An inspiring form and an accurate, intelligent language. "The smell of sweat in an empty bus": That is very vivid and evocative! I smell it. It might be raw, but I think I'll come back for more ;)

Great write!

K.

[Saddam]

the poem traveled me a journey of damn kiss.
very well ending and freshly.
Love this, kisses.

[Christoph]

Gosh. Yeah, that's a good reason.

[Calissa Knox]

This is beautiful. The last stanza was a perfect, finished ending. I really don't think you should change your poems after they've been written out raw like this. In my opinion, the fact that they aren't edited makes them more beautiful and unique, because they came from deep inside of you. I really enjoyed reading this. Your imagery, and the uniqueness of this poem is fantastic.

[Neon]

I liked the endin' of this poem. I enjoyed reading the poem and i really don't think there's any need for improvement in this great poem. Nicely inked.

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you for penning...:)............

[Roque]

I liked the journey taken in this poem, very beautiful

[Karen]

I like poetry that are full of imagery, things I can experience through the poem that will draw me in as a reader, and this is definitely one of those poems. I like that it is three kisses since the number three symbolizes the principles of growth. Now each image is separate and different, and the last kiss experience may be one of growth (it certainly differs from the other stanzas), but what kind of growth is what intrigues me. This is a good poem if it makes readers think! Thank you for writing and sharing with us!