Best revenge

I have this axe
Want to decapitate you
Kick your head around the room
I don’t, eventhough I want to

 

I have this rope
Want to hang you
Until you turn all blue
I don’t, eventhough I want to

 

I have this knife
Want to stab you
Want to slit through your vains
I don’t, eventhough I want to

 

I have this gun
Want to shoot you
Until you’re bleeding on the floor
I don’t, eventhough I want to

 

Eventhough you’re alive
I can still live
Because the best revenge
Is to forgive
 

Reviews

[ashley]

This is great. I really like this poem a lot. Two suggestions: In the 2nd stanza, "vains" is spelled "veins". The other suggestion is to maybe change "Until you turn all blue" to "Until you turn bright blue" or "dark blue". "All" is an empty word that you can usually either omit or change. Since you need the space for the beat, I suggest puting in an another one-syllable adjective like "dark" or "bright"... just my opinion. Either way, this poem is really good. :D