Long Shadows

some things are just too good to forget or let go...

 

Long Shadows

 

How upon how these long shadows

Insidiously fan out and weave

Between dappled pools of light and

Which seem to seize and steal

Our staccato breaths away

 

Before our very eyes it seems

And simultaneously so although

In different ways we bleed

Then on reflection 

 

I remember oh so well indeed

With every single thrust and heave

She made redundant muscles ache

And quenched the thirst of a

Very thirsty man in need

 

 

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is a vivid and sensual exploration of the interplay between light and shadow, and the ways in which they can evoke intense emotional responses. The use of imagery, such as the "dappled pools of light" and "long shadows," creates a sense of depth and movement that draws the reader in. The final lines, with their focus on physical sensation and desire, add a layer of sensuality and intimacy to the poem, inviting readers to share in the speaker's experience.

[Neville]

and the more the merrier my friend .. many magnificent thank you's .. I do so love your insightful reviews .............. Neville

[Lorry]

I'm confused Nev, as to what she done to make you ache so much, what with you being so innocent. I'm guessing her horse had died and she harnessed you up to plough the field, but not meaning that in a kinky way, perish the thought. 😊

[Neville]

... who's been sayin wot to who .. 🐧..🐧.

[Lorry]

I never disclose a source 😊

[Neville]

my guess it was either Daddies or HP .. 🐧..🖤

[Lorry]

Daddies. I'm not made of money! 😊

[Chris Shaw]

What a fabulous poem. Love the rich imagery and how it got to me on an emotional level. Lovely, language, dappled pools of light, staccato breaths, redundant muscles. Well done Neville. A great read.

[Neville]

you got me blushing... thank you my friend, thank you very much indeed......Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Great work.

[emmajoy]

Methinks there's a long long story behind this poem.. but whether or not, your phrasing as ever has - can i use the word - 'finesse' about it plus, a tad of warmth.

[Neville]

Sometimes gut feelings are nearer the truth than when one stops to think about it... Thank you E.....N..

[Einstein Noodle]

a communion of needs. this plays out in so many quarters.
"But in different ways we bleed"
says it all.
E.

[Neville]

Thank you so much for stopping by, your time & opinion both mean a great deal to me E.
All Good Things,
N

[Mina]

I agree with Sami I love the style of your poetry
Its something that stays with a person
Easy to grasp nd so full of depth

Really great :)

[Neville]

Wow much appreciated, thank you so much. All Good Things, Neville

[Stella Armour]

oh wow, one of the poems i have read for a while.. putting in my library>>>

[Neville]

Bless you Stella, I can't begin to express what that means to me. I shall reciprocate tomorrow when I hope to feel a little more refreshed. It has been a very long day. All Good Things Neville

[Stella Armour]

i have only just noticed that you are English like me...lol night God bless my friend..

[Neville]

Night night Stella, N

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. This awesome poem should get a lot of reviews for it is magical and perfect ...You are talented indeed ...:)
AGT

[Neville]

Too kind Sami, far too kind by half but I thank you dearly. N

[Sami Khalil]

Good stuff ...I like this style a lot...You are welcome...AGT