Mocku

Nowhere near a haiku, or a senryu. Almost a faiku tho, but not quite....

Moku

 

Sooner or later

The pen shall better the sword

While liars run away and voyeurs all applaud

 

 

Author's Note

tricky little variant.....

Reviews

[sette]

what a perfect world it will become.. hail hail hail

[Neville]

It most certainly would.. thank you sette.... N

[lightsong]

I'm thinking that Your "moku" would be a beautiful Japanese name! if not used before. now let me make it clear in my head, it seems that not the word or the pen works, then what will be working? any idea for a next faiku?

[Neville]

I have an idea but not telling.. not just yet anyway.. thank you so much for visiting my Moku..... Neville

[lightsong]

will wait and see :)

[Neville]

hope so.....

[lightsong]

tell me when You do so I won't miss it.

[Neville]

I have a feeling you won't miss it...

[lightsong]

good... :)

[Chris Shaw]

The pen has always been mightier than the sword Neville. That's why I have so much time for writers. Have a happy evening.

Chris

[Neville]

Thank you Chris & the very same to you..... Neville

[Lyn Anderson]

T'is a nice little thing you've come up with here. And yes, it shall, and hopefully sooner rather than later

[Neville]

Here, here & so slay all of us....we also say thank you and mean it... N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a good kind of voyeur here...the one who watches others' written works come to form and come to theme.

and i feel the pen has always been mightier...because mental mite smites physical...when it comes down to it.
j.

[Neville]

The reason I write is because I can no longer run, punch, kick or hide.....thank you sir for checking in and signing out... tis as always much appreciated.... Neville

[Sami Khalil]

You never cease to inspire us with masterful poems and words of wisdom. I think Andrew Mitchell might envy you. Pen is mightier than the sword, spirit is mighteir that all weapons and hope is mightier than all storms.

[Neville]

your encouraging words are a poem in their own write..........but I do so thank you for them... N

[Sami Khalil]

You are very welcome...

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a dark playfulness in your words that makes each line come alive in a world of its own. I look forward to that day.

[Neville]

Don't we all my fine literary friend.. and many thank you's wing their way t'ward thee... N

[An owl on the moon]

Wishing you endless inspirations today... and every day. C

[Neville]

Cheers Craig & back at ya.....

[barleygirl]

Your stabbing wit needs no package or parameter. You could just hang your satire out there for all to enjoy (& wince) . . . by line 2, we've forgotten to note poetic form becuz your words ring so true (((NUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Neville]

Hey Margie.. this old guy just can't thank you enough.. I hope you know that... He want's to but his wife won't let him.. Nug Nug..... N

[barleygirl]

Good one! Goes down hot & smooth just like my Bailey's Irish Cream in strong coffee! *smile*

[Neville]

Just the way I Like it, strong that is...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Your pen has always been better than the sword...it writes happiness, beauty, love, and life... it remembers...the sword is just nice to look at and to handle.;p

[Neville]

You are far too generous for words my friend but I thank you with them regardless...... Neville