Breathe

Breathe

 

Breathe

one more time my love

I just need

to hear you sigh ..

Breathe

one more time for me

my love

I need to see

both your chest and belly

rise in time

With those gentle

undulations ..

Like two

fallen sparrows might

In their

single quest to taste the sky

 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

a sigh is my response sir! subtle sensuous beauty says i! without flourish nor fanfare a peaceful tranquility in the love and "breath" held between two. ... it's been a while my friend .. i have held my glass up for you and yours more than several times as I howled at the moon.. we are an eclectic group here at the Cafe' ... ain't we!? :)
E.

[Neville]

......... yes, it has been a while my friend, there is a lot going on .. I shall raise my glass to your health tomorrow at noon my time ............ N

[Einstein Noodle]

some friends let me tag along last evening to our small local craft brewery called "Gravity Brew Works" just outside of Big Flat, AR. It's a great place "where everybody knows your name" .. the first toast I raised was "down yer neck!" ..no one knew what I was talking about and so I told them about me English friend who taught me that celebratory cheer! luv ya man! :)

[Neville]

and me you Gene .............................. N :)

[lightsong]

I see in your returning You've decided to take the Ladies breath away... well You took mine. spectacular dear Neville, I wish I've written something as simple and powerful, glamorous as this.

[Neville]

I can not thank you enough my dear friend, what a truly uplifting note you have left here for me to find this evening .. heart-warming on this cold dark winter eve is a serious understatement .. Neville x

[lightsong]

It's also a cold, stormy, raining and DARK evening here, please stay warm dear N❤️

[Neville]

You just made me make my happy noise again ❤️ x

[Anna]

sigh. this is a beautiful, intense poem that immediately caught my attention. short yet so deep, so powerful. amazing piece :)

[Neville]

what a lovely review you have left for me Anna .. many thanks indeed ... N

[John the Baptist]

Very nice restrained erotica here. Liked especially the fallen sparrows imagery. The sparrows on one level refer to the body parts, but on a deeper level to the lovers themselves.

[Neville]

thank you John ............................. N

[lessa (kenzie)]

I really enjoyed this write, love the closing lines

[Neville]

Thank you Kenzie ................... N :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

The simple quest of life so simply penned as a plea of the heart.

[Neville]

thank you for visiting these words Cherrie much appreciated .. nice avatar by the way .. N

[Cherrie Palmer]

:) I always enjoy reading from your collection. And thank you

[Neville]

......... I really am smiling BIG .. reviews are very rare these days .................. Neville

[Cherrie Palmer]

Yes I get very few reviews as well. Which is fine. However like all writers it's good to get a pat on the head from time to time. :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

And maybe a cookie

[Gee]

I can both feed you and pat your head:)
This place has changed massively during my 7 year stint, not always for the better

[Cherrie Palmer]

I agree. I mean I've never been in the mainstream ( but have always enjoyed reading-reviewing and receiving a review in return.) But the atmosphere is changing and alittle passive aggressive.

[Neville]

I most sincerely concur .......................................................