A bold First move

A bold First move

A Poem by Niki Disaster

I no longer have an attachment to question marks.
  i have unhooked them from my sleeve,

released them from my pen.
   and wish to leave them behind a locked door
   where no one can see them shaking...


one more obstinate obstacle that
   He will no longer avoid when
it won't stop appearing in front of him - but


he's got a knack with ignoring that
i am beginning to appreciate because
it leaves me lonely just long enough,
      just as often as i need


and it speeds up the pace of my feet
and
    i've got to keep up
  stay down
      watch out and
remember not to yell

© 2008 Niki Disaster


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I no longer have an attachment to question marks.
i have unhooked them from my sleeve,

released them from my pen.
and wish to leave them behind a locked door
where no one can see them shaking...

I loved these lines the way you opened it was amazing, it made me want to read it again and again

Posted 12 Years Ago


very nice. there is a great rhythm that runs throughout. i love the first line...it sets up the rest nicely...good job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like this a lot. It's vague enough to get a lot of suggestions swirling, and really get the reader thinking. The structure of the last stanza is really cool too.

-Evan

Posted 12 Years Ago


I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!! ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT. 100 DAISIES.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is quiet interesting I've never read anything like this, it was a great read though, i enjoyed reading it, great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on April 16, 2008

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Niki Disaster
Niki Disaster

Stockton, CA



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I am a 21 year old college student up in northern California, Majoring in English and loving every moment. Everything I write is personal, all stemming from my personal experiences and emotions. I t.. more..

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A Poem by Niki Disaster