QUEST OF LIFE

this is about how one neglects his life ,pondering about this precious gift of nature unnecessarily

life is a cozy bed

then why am I always sad?

have I gone mad

or simply just trapped.

I don't know where to head 

when it has no trough or crest.

sometimes I do this, sometimes I do that

am I a cat or a rat?

to quest it out, I have sat

is it  a misconcept or a fact?

one day I met two princeton

one was sodium and other was krypton

the former showed me the bright new dawn

unfortunately I couldn't grasp it on

later I realised the tone

and my life rocked on..!! 

 

I know you too are in a trauma 

wondering about the life drama

the lesson is not to ponder

but to enjoy the wonder

because life is a cozy bed

& you always have to step ahead. 

Author's Note

Hey guys! sorry for ur inconvenience in reading the poem , so to rectify my mistake here is the explanation to the poem.
1. Life is such a warm and comfortable bed then why i am not happy ?.Has something gone wrong with me or i have been trapped in this puzzling life. I don't know what to do next when this life neither has a start (trough) nor an end(crest).
2.In this life race I am confused about my job,positions etc and then i compare myself with a cat or a rat that is question myself whether i am dominating and doing what i wish to do or just being carried away by the outside world. So, finally i have sat to analyse the situation and to find out if it happens to me only.
3.The day,when i had a dialogue with the almighty Lord brought a turning point in me He introduced me to the two different souls of mine that is sodium(reactive) and krypton(non reactive). The reactive soul taught me (krypton) the art to live, but being narrow minded I couldn't get the point but later when i gave it a deep thought i came across the real scenario of life.
As you already know , the motto of last stanza is to introduce the readers with the correct way of leading a life.

Reviews

[nathan]

I will be honest with you. The idea behind this piece is deep but I found that as I read along it started becoming tedious ergo my advice would be to work on it some more and cut out some unnecessary wording.
All in all i liked it. Keep the fire burning

[bsgupta]

awesome! I enjoyed it very much & wish the little authors a great success.
bsgupta

[Helena]

This was a nice poem but did not fit the contest rules. Please read them again. Thank you for posting it, anyway. :) Helena

[Sunni Davis]

I love the opening line. It pulled me right in. There's a voice of longing, of questioning here which is something most everyone can relate too. We've all questioned life at one point or another and you've expressed that very well. Keep writing!

[Crystal Marie Rome]

Really awesome! I loved the rhymes you did and it's great that you used the metaphor 'Life is a cozy bed'. This is great and do your best! =)

[EMF]

I have no idea at all why I like this, but I do. I'm a devil for punctuation and removall of text speak, so this should irritate me, but I loved it. Funny and thoughtful. Wonderful phraseology. Thank you for posting it

[Allister]

Hi Thanks for your comment on "The Poll Tax" appreciated.
Now although I got the gist of what is being said in the above article The latter two lines in the first verse and all of the second verse kinda threw me off course somewhat either ways keep up the good work and thank you for the share.
Allister.

[Tom Benson]

Interesting form, if it is a recognised form. A simple uncomplicated statement of affairs as seen by the writer(s).

[Rikkevi Rue]

good one! =)

[a donkey, briefly]

like how this draws u in, spins u around, makes u whack the pinata of self
the blindfold comes off like a band aid from a hairy arm
dig it
curiosity is where it's at
love the lessons here

[Xicor]

Nice Work !