In the storm alone

It's just a thought

She was standing by her own 

She was at the centre of the storm alone 

Everything was unclear 

Everything was terrible 

The noise was getting up at the same moment when a killer silence spreading around .

Her heart was racing 

She knew , the this was the end 

The darkness was controlling the situation 

Yeah , yeah of course this was the end obviously. 

She felt a cold liquid running on her face 

It was her blood .

damn! , she thought that , the blood is must be warm , even in that she was wrong. 

Okay , this absolutely was her end 

She looked while the challenging was radiating from her brown eyes and said with screaming tone , " I will not wait the end until it comes and kills me ;

I will obtrude it myself ;

With every single piece of my mind , heart , and soul ;

I will do it , i will go to my end by my whole desire, and make it a new beginning ;

I'm the only one who decide how will i became ; 

I will change my destiny 

I'm the only one who make my own future;  

Whatever will happen i will never give up" . 

Then she jumped directly to the deepest part of the storm. 

Author's Note

What do you think, guys?

Reviews

[Derrick]

Loving the raw bravery and determination this screams!

[Patrick Jinks]

It would appear English is not your first language. If I may suggest a few corrections that may help the passage flow.

standing by her own- 'standing ON her own'

the this was the end- 'THAT this was the end'

running on her face- 'running DOWN her face'

blood is must be warm- 'blood must be warm'

wait the end until it comes- 'wait until the end comes'

how will I became- 'how I will become'

only one who make my own future- 'only one who WILL make my own future'

It seems a lot but it's just a few minor missing words or sentence structures. I did really like the passage, especially that last line. :)

[rowan.taylorrr]

i love this aw it's great. i love the last line

[Nora]

Thanks for your words, appreciate it ❤

[Surya]

Last stanza I loved it more than the rest of the poem, I loved it...:)

[Nora]

Thanks, but you know it's not a poem , i considered it a short writing or something like that

[Hiraeth]

This is worth the read. I can feel that you have really put your heart in this piece. well done!

[Nora]

Thank you a lot 😊😊

[kristindanielson]

i feel like she's swimming into the storm through to the other side

[Nora]

Yeah correct, pray for her to reach the safe side 😊😊

[Rassoul]

Very well written!
Never stop writing and never stop sharing your beautiful words with us.

[Nora]

Thanks, you're always nice 😊😊