Oh- well... I couldn't think of a title...

They say we bleed the same,
But we don't bleed the same amount.
My back is full of wounds,
So many shanks, you just couldn't count.
It's appalling,
Some say I don't deserve it.
But if that's true;
Then what the f*ck is the purpose?
I am just perfect,
I am just fine.
I can keep rollin',
With blades sticking out of me, like a porcupine.
I'll pull em out later,
I'll just jam em back into another hater!
Cause I use it as motivation,
They wanna try to stop my positive correlations!
They want me down a steep slope,
But I don't do that geometry,
Cause that sh*t is elementary!
I'm on the verge of seeing a cemetery,
But I ain't bout to get buried,
I'm like a zombie, I still want brain!
My Ark(arc) just started, so I can flow on the rain.
I'll never be a wrecked train,
Cause I stay on the tracks.
The flows in my veins,
Like lyrical crack.
Though I'm stained and tainted,
I'm so fresh and so clean.
I virtually look painless.
Some call it lunacy,
I call it seeing the light.
I told em, "I don't give a damn if I'm not liked."
Cause I do my best anyway-
And if you can't respect that,
Then you're nothing but a piece of egotistical crap.
And karma will come back and bite that a*s like a bear-trap!
You lost... and I ain't talking bout being without a map,
It didn't kill me, it just made me strong enough to give your face an epic b*tch smack!

Reviews

[Prodigo]

You sensed a bit of heated passion? It's poetry kid. As for offensive language no one gives a damn. It's a bit lengthy, I would shorten it and tighten it up...and yes, shortening and tightening up are two different things. Read more poetry because there is no rhythm here, and the language doesn't weave like poetry should. Get rid of the useless words and complete phrases and this might go somewhere. Enjoy.

[Wolfbaby]

I sensed a bit of heated passion in this... Pretty good, only some of the language you used could be offensive to your readers.

~Wolfbaby