Heaven and Hell.

Heaven and Hell.

A Poem by October

 

I’m sorry there was a murder. That’s unfortunate. But… Can you tell Heaven from Hell? If you had to point it out between your lovers eyes. Use a shot gun, find it faster.
 
You had me at marijuana. Reefer. Weed. Pot. It hits the apathetic spot. I’m sorry I hurt you. That’s unfortunate. But… Could you tell Heaven from Hell? Could you give me direction? You’re too busy humming to yourself. You may have known it once. But you’ve forgotten.
 
“I love you,” you say. Soft lips. Brown eyes. Such a beautiful girl. Such a beautiful lie. I’m sorry I don’t fall over my own rejections that come from your pretty face. That’s unfortunate. But… You don’t know Heaven from Hell. You don’t even know this mind you claim to love so well.
 
Quiet man with a lot of pain. It’s your business, it’s your shame. But I could help you mend the broken parts, if you could do me the same. Maybe we could find Heaven in this Hell. Or maybe we’ll crash and burn. Hit the wall. Maybe it doesn’t exist at all.
 
Could I tell Heaven from Hell? Could I even see it with eyes full of tears? Maybe I’ll be over you in a few years. I’m sorry you’re gone. That’s unfortunate. 

© 2008 October


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Some nice internal rhyme going on; it emphasises certain words, which enhances the reflective tone.
Brave layout, gets me full of admiration. I'm a sucker for prose-style poetry haha.
The whole poem is intriguing because I'm not sure exactly what's going on but you've provided enough material for the reader to take a few educated guesses.
Refrain of "That's unfortunate" works well. I hear it spoken kind of deadpan...or maybe musing. Dunno know.

Cheers for sharing this with me.

p.s.
"out between your lovers eyes" [lover's?]

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Some nice internal rhyme going on; it emphasises certain words, which enhances the reflective tone.
Brave layout, gets me full of admiration. I'm a sucker for prose-style poetry haha.
The whole poem is intriguing because I'm not sure exactly what's going on but you've provided enough material for the reader to take a few educated guesses.
Refrain of "That's unfortunate" works well. I hear it spoken kind of deadpan...or maybe musing. Dunno know.

Cheers for sharing this with me.

p.s.
"out between your lovers eyes" [lover's?]

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

love is love
what is is
best to remember the best bits
a nice piece of work

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Love can definitely be bumpy in the best of times. this is a captivating and riviting poem. Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Oh my not sure what to say, when love gets complicated with outside interference the lines of heaven and hell can become blurry... a very powerful and intoxicating write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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October
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