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If a Bumblebee Can Fly, Why Can't I?

If a Bumblebee Can Fly, Why Can't I?

A Poem by Legion
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Something goofy I just thought of from a pig's perspective on flight.

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If a Bumblebee Can Fly, Why Can't I?

 

 

 

If a bumblebee can fly,

I must question why can't I?

Will I find success or die

If I should give it a try?

 

Pursuing the idyllic dream,

A chance at one clandestine scheme,

I run and with a mighty jump

Launch, through the air, this porcine rump.

 

For a moment of pure exhiliration

I become one with the avian nation.

 

But gravity, I find, is no friend of mine

And reality proves that this portly swine

Returns heavily with such a squishy thud

And lands on his dignity, rump in the mud.

 

Oh, Mr. Bumblebee

Won't you please, please tell me

All the secrets of your success

And stop laughing at my distress?

 

 

Legion

23AUG08

© 2008 Legion


Author's Note

Legion
This is the buzz on the streets anywho. :)

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Very cute message, though I sort of get the feeling that you tried too hard to make it rhyme and in some places it didn't flow as nicely as other places. But that's just me, and I like to feel a certain rhythm when I read.

I absolutely enjoyed the little story that it told though. Nice job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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LOVE IT...difficult to think like swine ..I tried ..did not come up with htis..good one.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very cute message, though I sort of get the feeling that you tried too hard to make it rhyme and in some places it didn't flow as nicely as other places. But that's just me, and I like to feel a certain rhythm when I read.

I absolutely enjoyed the little story that it told though. Nice job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

And this is why...Wil E Coyote doesnt fall until he looks down.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LOL, reminds me of Dr. Suess and society. I take pleasure in reading this work because it has nothing to do with nothing, unless you read too much into it, and take away the fun. Light hearted and lots of wisdom... All I can say is, from an authors point of view, I think this is something that has been kept in your head until the right time came along. I loved it! ks

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thought this was hilarious! I think kids would love it!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Before you give up on your imperfect, earthbound self, Legion, I suggest you try two things:
1) Find a moonwalk that will let large rumped telluric person in- can you remember the last time you jumped in one as a child??
2) Buy a ticket to Guatemala, and go climb the Pacaya volcano. On its steepest slopes at the top, about 1/4 mile after the trail turns into about 3' deep underfoot styrofoam like tiny balls of pumice, turn around and run downhill. you will feel like you are flying as you leap down the slope, and the gentle landing cushioning your fall is like nothing else.

Only after you've tried these two things, can you seriously claim the bumblebee is laughing at you. Others tell me hard drugs are the best solution after that.

In all seriousness, I loved this poem. It made me smile, and I needed a smile today.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was so enchanting...and I agree it would make a wonderful children story. Beautiful and the it flowed wonderfully.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thought this was a very funny, cute write. This definitely has the potential of being a children's poem for Highlights or some other child-related publication. I especially liked the last stanza, an adorable ending.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is adorable I love it! Cute write, keep it up. :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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LSS
I absolutely loved it. We have all tried an had equal success. I especially enjoyed the nice rhyming that keeps the poem flowing smoothly. Your clandestine scheme, your porcine rump, even the comparable reference to the large ungainly bumble of bees all add to the mental pictures we can envision and enjoy. Thanks.
Lar

Posted 15 Years Ago


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