If a Bumblebee Can Fly, Why Can't I?

If a Bumblebee Can Fly, Why Can't I?

A Poem by Legion
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Something goofy I just thought of from a pig's perspective on flight.

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If a Bumblebee Can Fly, Why Can't I?

 

 

 

If a bumblebee can fly,

I must question why can't I?

Will I find success or die

If I should give it a try?

 

Pursuing the idyllic dream,

A chance at one clandestine scheme,

I run and with a mighty jump

Launch, through the air, this porcine rump.

 

For a moment of pure exhiliration

I become one with the avian nation.

 

But gravity, I find, is no friend of mine

And reality proves that this portly swine

Returns heavily with such a squishy thud

And lands on his dignity, rump in the mud.

 

Oh, Mr. Bumblebee

Won't you please, please tell me

All the secrets of your success

And stop laughing at my distress?

 

 

Legion

23AUG08

© 2008 Legion


Author's Note

Legion
This is the buzz on the streets anywho. :)

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Very cute message, though I sort of get the feeling that you tried too hard to make it rhyme and in some places it didn't flow as nicely as other places. But that's just me, and I like to feel a certain rhythm when I read.

I absolutely enjoyed the little story that it told though. Nice job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Absolutely delightful, loved this lighthearted poem. Oh and thanks for the kind review of ( Booty and The Beast, your comments and friendship are much appreciated.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Nice poem, but maybe a little over written. Reminds me of some songs from the sound track of Juno. Good write-Danny

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very interesting and witty write. Wonderful rhyme scheme.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Well, if happy little bluebirds fly beyond the rainbow then I don't see why you can't join a commune of bees? I don't know about falling on your rump with a thud, but they may not take too kindly to the invasion and you could end up a pincushion...that would cure your wishful thinking...
Humorous and deep in many ways, with a particularly good message of freedom.
Helen :-)

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

very enlightning, asking why to the things that makes us so different,
:D you've just inspired me,

---mishel

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

funny and yet so true!
excellent, my be-hooved friend. :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This was so much fun to read. It really made me smile. I need a cheerful piece today. This is so great. Thank you so much for sharing it.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Perhaps it is because I am out in left field bumbling about and trying to avoid the particular bee I unintentionally disturbed, but I cannot help read more into this beyond the humor of it. For why should it just be us humans that sit around wondering and pondering about just how we are going to manage to keep up with our good neighbors the Joneses, being able to have and to do all they are able to do that we are unable to do. How arrogant of us to think that there may not be some relatively happy pig out there that just happens to catch sight of the flight of a bumblebee... thus wondering if he can fly as well. Yes, this piece is a slap in the face for all humankind - a wake up call for us - and a triumphant depiction of the hopes and dreams of a pig only wishing he could fly... well done.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

hahahah so cute, so hilarious! stinking gravity gosh. =P

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Haha, that's great. Bumblebees suddenly don't seem so innocent anymore.

Posted 15 Years Ago


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