Paradox Personified

23/11/12 I find writing within myself, can you see me within the writing? Language is beautiful, but it will never really reflect what's in our heads even when used by the most careful tongues

The cruel tragedy is ours,
An undignified declaration of emotion
Surging
- Like the tongue that dances on tomorrow's headline -
Is all we have to offer,
From first breath to fateful death.

This is a shade of the most transparent lake.

My words are not as I desired.
They will never be cryptic cyanide -
Just an empty casket;
A vacant face I can't replace despite it's failure.

My pages become paradox personified.
Behind the ink I hide but still appear,
A distorted trace of truth
Within a blissful fiction.

Author's Note

Short and simple

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Words can never truly convey each and every feeling we have within ourselves, unless someone has lived our exact life, you can empathize and have compassion but never really live among our words. We might linger and dwell in other's sorrows and delights, but we've only really touched upon their essence. I really love this one Willow...excellent!

[Ohhhwillow]

For me it's quite surreal to think of all the memories and thought, feelings we'll never have that others will, and vice versa. Thanks for stopping by Frieda, you've become one of my favourite reviewers!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Great work love the thought of this piece :)

[pasdepoisson]

"cryptic cyanide"- great name for a band! I've always loved Hamlet's line about "poison in jest." Is it not that our greatest thoughts, when compromised by the imperfect filter of language, are still-born and misshapen? Embrace the personified paradox- it reflects the paradox of our nature.

[Ohhhwillow]

Never considered that before, I supposed it would haha! Exactly, distorted by the bounderies our world sets upon us, all we really have is our voice and pen.. Often not enough to convey tender thoughts. That Hamelt line is lovely. :) I suppose you are right there, thank you for giving me something to think about!

[quinfinn]

words are all we are when taken at face value, this is a powerful piece of writing indeed. from cradle to grave, all we are is what we do and what we say. too bad most of us never make them one and the same. well done....

[Ohhhwillow]

The struggle to make the two line with one another, even when we have an honest intentions, is difficult and frustrating. Sometimes there are no words to describe or deepest thoughts and feelings and so actions describe them, wrongly. Thank you

[eglantine]

Love that single-line second stanza. Instead of "of" I'd use "for" though. Interesting poem.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you! You're right that would sounds good, I'll give it some thought, glad you though so!

[Winchester Saltgunner]

Luv it

[Ohhhwillow]

Good! :D

[Winchester Saltgunner]

Teehee

[mikl paul]

i love what you do. :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Aw, why thank you. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I like the "My words are not as I described" stanza. Nice piece

[Ohhhwillow]

Glad you enjoyed that, thanks Baby Ricochet :)

[Tarry Franck]

What terrific piece of work. And if true, I'm so sorry for your loss.

[sheila.j]

This is awesome...great write

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks Sheila!

[Geon Quuin]

This is a good piece. There's wisdom somewhere beneath the ink used to mold your thoughts into words. Also, congratulations for winning that contest. :D I came in second.

[Geon Quuin]

the contest aforementioned is this: http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/ANTIDISESTABLISHMENTARIANISM/47196/
the piece I submitted to the same contest is this: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/GeonQuuin/1079043/

[Ohhhwillow]

I'm certainly no wise owl, but thinking is something I do more often than not if that constitutes. :) Thank you! And congratulations yourself! :D

[Geon Quuin]

thanks. nonetheless, I came in second. so it's pretty much f**k all.