A Poem by OkieWonKenokie

random Haiku....first time writing one.....


Overwhelming hate

Physical torture of the mind

Feeling of not being loved

© 2010 OkieWonKenokie

Author's Note

just a bit random....I'll crits on this so i know next time to know how to make them better than this one........ :D

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I know that feeling

Posted 11 Years Ago

Big-BOLD-Red letters with only three lines can say a lot to many people. Great-just excellent! I just love it! :D

Posted 11 Years Ago

Wow, for just a few words, that says a lot. It brings up the question, what kind of torture as it? I'm going to lean towards some sort of mental torture. The only torture that can be collected by only a loved one.
A lot of pain… a lot of pain

Posted 11 Years Ago

It's amazing to take the Haiku form and create what seems so free. You've given us a powerful glimpse of hate and what it does to rip us apart inside. Excellent emotional piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Writing is always the best way to get things out...this was very powerful and no mistaking the point. You should do this more often...I loved it. Good morning sunshine!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Three powerful sentences. Bad place to be in these places the sentences can take you to. Better to run like hell and leave no tracks. A outstanding three line poem. Thank you.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on July 18, 2010
Last Updated on July 18, 2010



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