RELAPSING REMITTING

Sorrow that comes and goes...but mostly stays.

RELAPSING REMITTING

It comes...and it passes, but sometimes it stays.
Remorse and privation, conecting the maze.
Each day is a rerun of pain and regret.
I miss him...I need him, the shadows are set.

The gaze in the mirror is not meant to be.
A life with it's meaning was not made for me.
I loathe it and push it but yet it holds strong.
This can't be my mission...for everything's wrong!

The world keeps revolving and spins its own way,
But I must be leaving...I've no more to say.
Please do not deter me, my mind has been made.
I've readied the moment...too long I have stayed!

So please don't be angry, it's not about you.
I know that you've offered to change what you do.
But hope and belonging have parted from me.
It really won't matter if I am set free.
~~

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Such a sadness in this: past catching up with present then, lighting the way into the future which... for me, is rarely the right thing. Your meter and the telling of the tale, your emotions, the longing and loss, are so clearly laid... this could be true, real.. not asking. Tis a tragedy past, so pray not one for the future..

[Miss Sharon]

Dear Emmajoy...I always so appreciate your generous and kind review of my poetry! Sadly...this IS a true story about learning to accept the death of my only son almost 5 years ago. ~Sharon

[emmajoy]

Dear Sharon, what to say... tis always so hard to find the right words so maybe (Sharon) is more appropriate.

To be honest tho, dear you, one never knows if a story or poem is fact or fiction. It's so much more than fact for you.. such heartbreak. xx

[Miss Sharon]

You are such a sweetie. Thank you for your lovely comment and your compassion as a friend. ~Sharon

[Tate Morgan]

This is without a doubt the best you've created bravo

[Miss Sharon]

What a nice thing to say. Thank you so much Tate! ~Sharon

[Tate Morgan]

You are so welcome

[Tate Morgan]

This piece almost sings to me in the way it is set up

[Shabeeh Haider]

There is some pain in life that never goes away. It is an eternal suffering. A reality that we have to face and endure every moment.
The last stanza is very painful. Sometimes we are so "engrossed" in our sorrow that we hurt the people who love us the most. They don't deserve it but we feel powerless to change ourselves and move ahead for their sake.
As always your rhyme and meter is excellent.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you for your generous and compassionate review. You are appreciated! ~Sharon

[wordman]

my aunt went through the same experience,her son was 19 when he died
a touching write sharon, wish i could wave a magic wand,i would if i could

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you so much Ron for your kind review and compassion. You've been a good friend to me and I thank you. ~Sharon

[wordman]

i try sharon to be sweet to every one,and you`re very welcome

[Miss Sharon]

:>) (

[Lydia Shutter]

Your words frighten me, Sharon. I know you miss your son terribly. It is unspeakable when a child passes before a parent. Still, you have a lot more life to live. If your religion and spiritual beliefs are correct, he will be patiently waiting for you. Please know you are of more use right here on earth. Your words are so emotional....I am here if you need me. Lydi**

[Miss Sharon]

My dear sweet friend...I am sorry if I've worried you with this write. I did feel this way at one point in time, but as the years pass I am learning to adjust and accept things that can't be changed. And as you said...because of my religious beliefs, I know I will see my son again! I do so appreciate you Lydi! ~Sharon

[Lydia Shutter]

Sending you love, Sharon....always.

[Miss Sharon]

((My Lydi))

[Sarah]

I'm not sure if I'm reading too much into it, but parts of it sound like a suicide note. I really love how you packed so much emotion into such a short amount of words. The way you conveyed the feeling truly speaks to the reader. I'm a fan of your style and your work!

[Miss Sharon]

You are very preceptive my dear. When my only son died almost 5 years ago, the thought of suicide did enter my mind, and those emotions were in my thoughts when I wrote this poem two days ago. However...I could never do something like that to my wonderful family. Thank you for your kind remarks! ~Sharon

[Sarah]

I'm sorry to hear that, but I love how you channel those emotions into something positive. Always keep writing!

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you again...and of course I will keep writing. I've been writing all of my life and find it to be therapeutic. ~Sharon

[Lyn Anderson]

If I had to surmise, it would be a description of an unhealthy and/or abusive relationship that has ended, but there is still regret. Well done
one minor thing - its does not need an apostrophe when it is possessive.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you for a nice review of this write as well as the note about the incorrectly placed apostrophe. I appreciate that. I am trying to improve my writing and do not need silly mistakes in a finished write. ~Sharon

[Lyn Anderson]

You are very welcome. I try not to let writers leave those things out there, and I appreciate the same.