I Wonder

Made it for a shape poetry contest.

          Just                                                   So many     problems with this crazy

      one person     world of      ours.  Pollution, disease,

     in a world of                                            wars, fighting, abuse, drugs, smoking,

        people.                                                terrorists, homeless, abandoned kids,

            I                                                     and other frightful terrors.  Why can't

 wonder if I will even                                     we just       come together and fix it? 

           m                                                     Swallow       our pride and unite for a

           a                                                                               common

           k                                                                               good? I

           e          wonder

         f   r    if we can

       f       e                                                                           still fix  

     i           n                                                                         the wo-

   d              c                                                                       rld, or if

a                   e            it's too

            late?

                               Why can't                             we just

                       learn to love, learn                 to laugh, or to cry

                  without shame? Why must         we wear masks; why play

               this game? Nobody's perfect,     and as soon as we accept it, we

              just might achieve what we want but won't admit. Where we can

               simply be ourselves, be true to the soul, and not have to worry 

               about everyone else's goal. If we just learn to show compassion

                 to others, and learn to sympathize, instead of judging your

                     brothers. Pity the deprived, and help the poor, find

                          the lost, and listen to the ignored. Take the

                                  load of the burdened, help the 

                                       unfortunate and broken,

          stand up for what's

                                           right; speak what

                                              needs to be

                                                 spoken.

                                                    BC

                                        

Author's Note

It's kind of the same stuff as my other poem, Can I Live in That World. Anyway, enjoy!

Reviews

[Esana Bridges]

Wow. This is AWESOME. I love the presentation. It's so beautiful, and - well, WOW! I love that you took so much time to make it like this. Just one look and I was blown away.

Okay, the ideas - great. I especially like the first one (since I think it's something that everyone thinks about sometimes). It flows great and I have to say, I feel like charging out and doing something good.

[x0void]

This is really great.. very artistic... you really have talent in writing.. do more! :)

Wow, what an ascii-art but most of all a beautiful outstanding poem! with a true message in it.... Amazing!

[Daniel DeLorez]

Good stuff. :) I can't tell what the shape in the top right is, but it's all very well written. I agree with Esana about the first part. I'm pretty sure everyone has had that thought run through their mind at one point or another. You've got a gift, for sure. :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you know what?~ the purity of this makes it effortless and poignant soul art~ and the composition and placement of images within the calligraphy is more that attention grabbing~ it crawls right into the heart and builds itself the perfect nest to germinate~ beautiful thoughts beautifully presented~

[SwagMaster]

I'm reviewing myself!! (It gives me points)

[noel potter]

i have tried several times to write like this and have yet to find myself drifting away from the style i have,, i love reading this kind of poems because they say what i wanna say yet my writtings are different in many many ways,, still i always seek out this kind of writing because it helps me understand why i write qwhat i write if this make sense to you ,, in other words this is a great write and i enjoyed it alot ,,

[A. L. Allen]

Wow! This is great! I love the way you shaped your poems to match the content. I love your idealistic train of thought; it also makes me wonder why those things can't be.

Great job!

[AfterTim]

Appreciate your creative expression in both your writing and presentation. You truly put your heart into your work, and your words are powerful.

All the best to you, and keep it up,
Titus
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