Body Art

Just an old Poem I wrote for a contest about a year ago. I really like how it turned out.

 

 

My Patch work soul depicts the very confusion within my mind set.

It is as soft and elegant as a baroque oil painting.

Yet it’s as vibrant as pop art.

 

The stain glass heart pulsating beneath the sculpture of my own physical being,

Is as rebellious as graffiti on a subway wall,

But still as structured and civilized as the Mona Lisa herself.

 

Blinded with radiance are my eyes,

Painted and shaded are my cheeks,

Even the tips of my fingers are adorned with the most unique of oddities.

 

My shoulders are draped with pure moonlight.

My hair in light summer dew.

I am a collage of emotion run wild.

 

Time is dangling from my ears.

Dreams are the pearls wrapped around my neck.

Love is the paint upon my lips.

 

I am a work of art.

Reviews

[a]

A little to egocentric for me, but very complex, well structured and colorful. Not much to add or take away, no should try to do it with this poem. Very good.
I guess, it was the authors aim to write using very rich vocabulary, and that's great, only if the "work of art" has been wanted to be essentially vibrant and luminous, some forms are over head to difficult and are interrupting the rhythm and theme. Still, this poem shines, shines brightly!
P.S. The 4th paragraph is the one I loved most. ;)

[Rachel DeHart]

"Time is dangling from my ears.
Dreams are the pearls wrapped around my neck.
Love is the paint upon my lips."

I adore the symbolism you used through out the entire piece, especially in the last bit. I can just picture the person you are talking about. :]

[Scott Lynn]

A wonderful look at how people are beautiful, and artful in their own rights.

[sheets]

Very good! Well written, the vocabulary used was to the extreme and I enjoyed it very much. I'm pretty confident that you will recieve many great reviews on this poem.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

I love it. Nice writing, especially I like the last line. "I am a work of art' , Thank you for sharing. Debileah