Original Sin

Original Sin

There is nothing f*****g original about it!

It’s simply a device

such as a playwrite would choose

to take you to his characters,

or a novelist would use

to lay out the plot,

or a director would employ

to deceive and intrigue.

So God, old boy,

YOU are not original

in making us suck on our guilt!

 

22/05/12

Reviews

[Forgotten]

Very powerful, it's harsh how the sin is believed to have carried on while the future of people may have done nothing wrong. Great write

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks J-P

[X]

Haha, nice take on this. I like it

[Leigh]

Good rant, not my fave of yours, but you have stirred some thoughts, like sin is older than us humans

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Leigh

[Leslie Philibert]

A witty look at a difficult subject - nice.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Leslie a rant from my childhood lol!

[quinfinn]

funny, i feel no guilt at all...maybe it's because i am pagan....nice rant!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

And I am now agnostic lol

[quinfinn]

whatever works for your peace of mind

[Frieda P]

The original sin was that 'man' stood idly by whilst Eve had the balls to pick that damn fruit in the first place. Who knows why he decided to give you guys the kahunas to being with ;)

Good poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey Judas, you stole our idylic future by enticing us with your fruits! What a Cow lol

[Frieda P]

omg, did you just call me a freakin cow!? lol

you cheeky monkey you! lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That's me!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to know sin from right nowadays. We twist-up the world so badly hard to know when we are doing the right or wrong things. My thoughts on life are similar to your thoughts. Better to live life without fear and don't allow mistakes to slow us down. I like the complete poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Coyote for such a considered response.

[Andorianskye]

honestly this is not my favorite of yours

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That is honest and OK

[Ayvid N]

Anger at feeling guilt is very effectively conveyed by this poem. And anger at God, because you are religious?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No I used to be religious then I discovered the real faith. Faith in oneself and not a religion in a football team or a film star or one culture orc an army.

[Ayvid N]

I admire that in people who have that confidence in themselves. But I just have to entrust it all to a higher entity at the end of the day. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am Darwinian in my philosophy and I believe we have to satnd alone in our belief as a race of perish.

[Ayvid N]

:( ....sounds...grim... and a bit intimidating!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No realistic and calming

[Nicky Sarti]

Not religious by any chance are we? :-D
It says a lot to me, again not that I could ever explain it; but as a non-believer I am interested in what others think and feel when it comes to religion.
I like the fact it is clearly about your "usual" (kidding) subjects, yet has a deeper side to it also.
I like this. A lot.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Nicki, Loved the Meetup on Wednesday. The new guys fitted in so well and what a great laugh! No hidden meaning Niky. just a plain old rant in a lapsed Catholic!