Something You Took

Something You Took

You didn’t love me at all.

In your suffering and pain

I was just your paracetamol

to dull the ache

and mask the guilt;

just something you took.

And I fell to be taken,

like a trusting child

open armed and reaching,

besotted as you smiled

to steal my heart and soul;

just something you took.

 

2005

Reviews

[Bewitching Sensations]

Had that happen more times then i care to mention.. but through it all i have become a better person... great poem x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Ruth

[Rhianne Ney]

Good use of an object not well known... I can't relate with the broken feeling but this is a well-written piece (:

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lets hope you NEVER relate to the broken feelings. Thanks for looking.

[Rhianne Ney]

I just want to return the favor for your kindness... (:

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Favours returned are magnified. I did not do you a favour. Iread some magnificent work from someone with ability and talent. You did me a favour by writing it!

[Rhianne Ney]

Thank you... and nice to meet you once again (:

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You too and I will read all of your work and keep in contact.

[Rhianne Ney]

thanks... you can skip the books if you want... I have a lot of unreviewed works something that is posted ages ago... thank you, i would really appreciate that

[New Dawn]

You captured well the use of someone as a panacea for their current needs and what happens when that panacea is no longer required. thought provoking write, good title, really enjoyed

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks!

[Cherrie Palmer]

Pain begets pain especially in a relationship and you have showcased this with much talent.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

My Cherrie Amour! many thanks.

[Anonymous Girl]

Lovely :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much!

[Anonymous Girl]

Its okay. ^^

[Pól]

Lovely metaphor

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Paulo.

[Heather]

With Love, it is hard not to give everything in them, to the person they love, just as the one you are giving it to, will take will take everything you have to give, just trying to heal. Both people in this relationship were broken, one giving too much, one taking too much, both what they needed to do at the time. Powerful exchange, even though unhealthy. She left you hurting, but your loving her probably healed her at the time. ... just my take on it

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Maybe. But she didn't want to be healed. She was proud of cheating and I can't say that makes me feel good. I was a fool as she was unhappilly married and came on to me and I fell as I was a t a low ebb having just ended a marriage. Still we live and learn and it gives us fodder for writing!

[Heather]

ahh emotional vampires lurk everywhere, sucking the life and love out of those too trusting. Fodder for writing indeed

[spiritwind]

I liked the size of this. It fit your message perfectly--you didn't drag it out--you said what you had to say and got out. Very few people know how to do that. Brevity is under-rated these days unfortunately. I think you have some sympathy for the perpetrator--you understand that she is in pain and trying to dull her pain and hide in borrowed temporary arms. Good work.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Your interpretation is spot on. Thank you for really reading it!

[Lily Mae]

Painful..sometimes it's hard to understand the way others love...when you give 100 percent of you in the relationship...some just eat you up and spit you out...x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

My mistake though. I am a giver and I ask for little in return but when that little is not given I can feel so let down. Yhat's life but hey ho I love it. Look at the great stuff on this site and the grest conversations and sharing. It's what makes the worls go round.

[Lily Mae]

xo so true...and thank you for sharing you..x