Painful Memories

Painful Memories
Thoughts can be of bitter fruits
or poisoned berries….
….and they endure.
They scar deep the psyche
till the record scratched
can play no more,
and we beg to stop
such pregnant melodies
inside our heads.
Such screeching,
nails on blackboard howls
that slits our ears
from tortured skulls
and dashes fragile hopes
upon such jagged rocks
of hate.

23/01/13

Reviews

[DIVYA]

They endure and play over and over like a record stuck....tormenting...
...and hopes turn to hate.

You create a perfect picture of that inferno here John! :
"and dashes fragile hopes
upon such jagged rocks
of hate."

Thanks for sharing "Painful Memories" - An emotional write I could absolutely relate to! - Divya

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Divya. Thankfully it was simply a thought that popped into my head rather than something I was feeling that inspired this piece.

[DIVYA]

Then It was a very well expressed well written one! You are welcome John!

[Leigh]

Very well put, there are times when having a memory good or not can be a curse

[John Alexander McFadyen]

True. Thanks Leigh

[Christoph Poe]

This is a piece that really gets under my skin--in a great way actually. The description of the chalkboard, specifically, raised the hair on my arms, and subdued that feeling I think you wanted out of your readers.

Again, great job!
--Christoph Poe

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Christopher.

[Sheila Marie Carr]

Painful Memories...
Beautiful expressions of words which describes such painful memories.
Especially when you can relate to every word...
Great job!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So much thanks Sheila

[Neville]

I enjoyed reading and pondering upon this very interesting & well written little jewel
with not even a hint of bodily fluids in sight, cheers. N

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No animals were hurt in the writing of this poem.

[Ambereen]

Ouch it hurt ! Well Done

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Ambereen

[Junert]

Hmmm!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thinking allowed!

[Junert]

Thinking good.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Excellent!

[Larry Dyson]

BTDT ...NICE EXPRESSION OF THE PLACE!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you

[KAOlmsted]

Ouch. I felt this one in my spine. Well done, John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hope it was not too uncomfortable!

[KAOlmsted]

It hurt just enough to remind me I'm still alive ;-)

[spiritwind]

You handled this very well--
I am very "fond" of "till the record scratched
can play no more,"
and
"dashes fragile hopes
upon such jagged rocks"
I might have left off the last line
had I penned this but I didn't so there it is

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks SW

[quinfinn]

i used to take meticulous care of my records, so much so that my friends and family though i was right off my rocker. but with life...for that to become scratched as such and be stuck on that pregnant pause, well that's just unforgivable. scratch my record, that's one thing...scratch my life, you owe me forever. excellent write, john!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Quin. Love the new avatar although staring at it too long induces travel sickness lol

[quinfinn]

yes, i suppose it could....i just dont stare at it, looks like a roller coaster ride to me.