Painful Memories Thoughts can be of bitter fruits or poisoned berries…. ….and they endure. They scar deep the psyche till the record scratched can play no more, and we beg to stop such pregnant melodies inside our heads. Such screeching, nails on blackboard howls that slits our ears from tortured skulls and dashes fragile hopes upon such jagged rocks of hate.
They endure and play over and over like a record stuck....tormenting...
...and hopes turn to hate.
You create a perfect picture of that inferno here John! :
"and dashes fragile hopes
upon such jagged rocks
of hate."
Thanks for sharing "Painful Memories" - An emotional write I could absolutely relate to! - Divya
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks Divya. Thankfully it was simply a thought that popped into my head rather than something I wa.. read moreThanks Divya. Thankfully it was simply a thought that popped into my head rather than something I was feeling that inspired this piece.
11 Years Ago
Then It was a very well expressed well written one! You are welcome John!
This is a piece that really gets under my skin--in a great way actually. The description of the chalkboard, specifically, raised the hair on my arms, and subdued that feeling I think you wanted out of your readers.
You handled this very well--
I am very "fond" of "till the record scratched
can play no more,"
and
"dashes fragile hopes
upon such jagged rocks"
I might have left off the last line
had I penned this but I didn't so there it is
i used to take meticulous care of my records, so much so that my friends and family though i was right off my rocker. but with life...for that to become scratched as such and be stuck on that pregnant pause, well that's just unforgivable. scratch my record, that's one thing...scratch my life, you owe me forever. excellent write, john!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thanks Quin. Love the new avatar although staring at it too long induces travel sickness lol
11 Years Ago
yes, i suppose it could....i just dont stare at it, looks like a roller coaster ride to me.
Well, have a long and complicated story and started it as an autobiography on Bebo but got writer's block/memory fogging. People liked it though and kept asking for the next chapter! fools.. more..