Goddess Deity of the River

Goddess Deity of the River

Yami, daughter of Surya

free me from the torment of death

as I immerse in your sacred waters.

You are indeed to be venerated

as you rise in majesty

from the Yamunatri

on the slopes of the Banderpooch,

from the mighty Himalayas to the Ganges basin,

you irrigate and feed the land

and quench the people's thirst.

 

17/03/13

Reviews

[Fergie]

Some of your best poetry is that which is influenced by myth and legend. You take your own spin on the story and make it come alive in the imagination through your transference of emotion. They become so unique.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That is quite something coming from someone who knows how to writ poetry well.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

wonderful tribulations, I really enjoyed this poem John

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema this review made my cry.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

with gratification I hope, dear poet

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No with humble faith and thankfulness for life. Thank you Sheema.

[KAOlmsted]

I wonder if you might consider creating a book on here, John, and compiling all of the historic writes you've penned and placing them where we can read them as one collection...I, personally, would love that. Just a thought ;-) Beautiful work, as always.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

wow thanks Kimmer. Not sure I have enough to make a 'book' though!

[KAOlmsted]

You could always add to it ;-) Of course it is my pleasure, as always, John...

[Keith LaFountaine]

Man John, every time I read one of your pieces I am blown away by your strong command of words. I can't praise this enough. And I'm not one who's super fond of poetry. However, your work continues to astound me. I honestly have no criticisms. Great job!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Keith that is a most kind thing to say and it warms my heart that you can enjoy what I write. Many thanks!

[Allan W]

I so wanted to like this. I loved the topic. I work with a lot of indians and appreciate their culture which is fascinating. And although the language used is descriptive and blends imagery with fact and I loved reading it. For me I couldn't read it as a poem - can't put my finger on why though? Loved it, but not as a poem? Sorry.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Allan. I prefer honest reviews without thin platitudes because we all have to keep developing and experimenting. It was difficult to weave the facts here into something I was completely happy with. Many, many thanks.

[Leigh]

What a fantastic way of thinking about it, a river as a goddess and you have put it so well. I can sense it's presence and relevance to the people around.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This just reflects the way the Peoples of India and Pakistan see their rivers and the mythology weaved around this faith. Thank you Leigh for the review.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A clever twist on an old soul, well done, good read.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank again Thomas.

[Leslie Philibert]

And I am right - John is moving on and developing as a poet, really like this !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Leslie I really appreciate your kind reviews. Many thanks.

[Frieda P]

This is a diversion for you, good read John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Freida

[ms. barrie]

A stunning poem, the exquisite imagery in depicting the mystique, mythological reference over India's many rivers, full of magical wonders, people's gratitude and reverence towards the river's nourishment and all she provides for them. Wonderfully penned, Mr. McFayden -- Thanks for sharing!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Barrie. Mr McFadyen sounds so formal!

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, "John" ;) -- This was not only a pleasure to read but interesting since I'm interested, though not really familiar with India's Mythology

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha,ha, I aM only learning about the heritage of India

[ms. barrie]

:) - So am I! As well as Celtic and once again brushing up on Greek Mythology also! So many mythologies, so little time!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Time is on our side Barrie

[ms. barrie]

true. now i have that Rolling Stones song in my head lol :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha good tune!

[ms. barrie]

I agree!