Call Me Naive

Call me Naive

So do you think love is a light bulb?

to be turned on in a moment of darkness

to illuminate our hearts,

only to flick the switch

when one of us leaves the room

and casts the other into night’s black place.

Do you see love a plastic cup

to be emptied, crushed and binned?

Or a disposable razor

to be discarded when dulled?

Surely this is not love

but merely passing fancies?

Surely love is more akin

a rugged, rocky coast

where weather beaten and

scourged by smashing breakers,

it becomes polished and smooth

but still endures.

 

10/05/13

 

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Perfect analogy John. Yes that is what love should be. But I'm afraid our society is all about convenience and brevity. Sad really!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you AMS

[Mark]

Wow ya, a rugged rocky coast polished smooth. Right on target in my opinion. Great write as always John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Mark. We all need a shoreline to form our reference for coming home. And once found we stop being tourists and settle near the ocean.

[Peter H]

claps . not many poem do the cliche themed "what is love " like how you did it here . i loved reading this it riveted me , and yes love should be something fortitude and resolute not something like the metaphor of switching the light on and off . this was excellently done impeccable poem

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Peter.

[Emerald Seas]

You picked some excellent metaphors for this poem. Today's society is full of the notion of instant gratification, I wonder if the true meaning of love is left among very many anymore. Your poem is spot on and very well articulated!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you QSS.

[Kristin Lee]

This is an absolute reflection of the truth behind real and abidding love. Very beautifully written.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Kirsten, very kind.

[Holly Mason]

love a few things-
plastic cup- emptied, crushed and binned
disposable razor- discarded when dulled
like the images of love mixed in with these lines
love polished- the more comfortable we get in a relationship the stronger it is the more it can take
I would love a love that leaves a room and leaves me in the dark- in that case they are my light...
enjoy when I come across your writing
that title choice just grabbed me
thank you for sharing

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Holly

[Andie]

The first half almost felt angery. Like you were chastising someone for mistreating love, or what they thought it was anyway.
It was a good poem, full of emotion. Good job, John. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks George

[PP]

Love is surely the toughest ride...persistence is key! I loved the last paragraph immensely..thank you for sharing this piece John :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Prathama

[PP]

You're welcome John :)

[rhythm&blues]

Brilliant, yes, there are those who think it can be easily turned off and on, easier than a light bulb I might think. This is lovely.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much R and B

[Rhianne Ney]

Whoa, this is actually great and I do think that you were able to twist the sense here properly and nice (: Great job~

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Rhianne

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome